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Really great start.
I guess my personal preference would be for her to have fought him off a little longer, but it was hot. Great start. Can't wait for more!
Nicely done
The authour has set up the background and the characters so very well.
I'm quite disgusted with the central male character and feel great pity for the female protagonist.
I am going to follow this story to see how it turns out. I'm certain it's going to be highly enjoyable.
Mentioned
You've been mentioned in the New Story Reviews in the Author's Hangout.
i like the story
waiting on the next one this is good
Very well done
Well written and erotic - I enjoyed it. Keep up the good work.
I loved this, great start to what could be
a very hot fantasy scifi piece. I'd love to know what happens next between the two and hope you add a lot of tension, both sexual and anger between the two, it just makes it so much better when they finally give in to their feelings. Wonderful job. Keep writing.
PS. Thanks for mentioning me in your post on the story review thread, that was so sweet. I'm glad you enjoy my work.
Let's just hope...
... that this fine tale doesn't remain just another unfinished fragment. There is definitely a lot of potential here.
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