I don't know if this was your first story or not! You should proof for grammer before submitting any further work. I lost interest when the story went into first person and the flow of the plot was lost. Try again. The line of the story was a good start.
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Anonymous11/09/08
creepy
belongs in NonConsent. this didn't do anything for me... the Anal category's not for forced anal.
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Anonymous04/05/09
complainers!
Not the greatest, but certainly good. OK, so he held her down a little so he could get to violate that virgin asshole, it was reasonably hot.
English
Not too exciting.
I don't know if this was your first story or not! You should proof for grammer before submitting any further work. I lost interest when the story went into first person and the flow of the plot was lost. Try again. The line of the story was a good start.
creepy
belongs in NonConsent. this didn't do anything for me... the Anal category's not for forced anal.
complainers!
Not the greatest, but certainly good. OK, so he held her down a little so he could get to violate that virgin asshole, it was reasonably hot.
Meh
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