by SunrockSin
a great deal of time went into the rhyme scheme in this poem. I found it, at times, to be more of a tounge twister. This took away from the rest of the poem.
sometimes things can be overdone and I believe that is the case with this one. Still good work, though
maria
With Maria 2394...poetry should be a thought or emotion summed up...I don't feel that here at all.
As a rule, I do not like to post negative public comments but when you are mentioned on the New Poems Review and Man Ray's "Repossession" was overlooked, I figured this must be something terrific.
Sadly, I do not find it so.
I can hear this read at a poetry slam.
I liked the images in the first stanza the most, how mirrors are changed into prisms, turning reflection into the spectrum of color. I would like to see more of a story, a transfer of meaning from these images. I really did enjoy reading this piece--
as