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Dreams Can Come True

byAvalanche Man©
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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous06/12/06

Good

Nice little vignette.

Boyd

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by don8765406/12/06

Good, but could be better

A little short in wording... And far too much emphasis placed on whether or not anyone is married to another. In these fantasy stories, concern should not be made for a fear of whether someone is married or not?

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by Anonymous06/13/06

Not bad but...

Not bad, but I can't figure the woman out. She seems mortified that she wore her see through bra and that people could see everything down her top but she knew that would happen from past experience so why did she wear that bra again? There is no indication that she is an exhibitionist. She has her first date and next thing you know she's taking her bra off and letting him have his way with her breasts. Her behavior might have changed over a longer time period but this story moves so fast that she just isn't a beleivable character.
And please we don't need "???" for every question! Just "?" would do.

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by DWornock08/18/11

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Didn't make sense.

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by Lickideesplit02/18/12

LW?

The only 'near wife' in this vignette is our heroine in her daydream (assuming she is being dressed in a wedding dress!). 'Romance' would be the appropriate category.

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