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Good, but could be better
A good story, but needs editing--BADLY!
baby two yrs after bro died ? ur dads ?
work on this
nice
nice story. carry on
Need Editing
It needs editing in the story. Make it more intimate, as this relation is very intimate. Make sure you continue.
Very Erotic
Man this is beautiful story... Congrats. Keep writing.. I'm your fan now... i'll be waiting for your new stories :)
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wonderfull story
It`s a nice story. very much erotic. Ilove this smooth kind pf love making with bhaby. Write more stories in which a smooth and heart felt love making sessions are occured. Don`t write rape or humilating stories. They aren`t erotic really.
Taking babhy in such a circumstances is nice. yes any babhi can accepts her devar in such a circumctances. It`s realistic.the smooth touchings and the caressing are good.spend much words on such romantic activities in ur stories. thanku once again.
the slow way is the Indian way
I loved the way he removes the clothes of his bhabhi very few writes are able to write erotic stories of the indian context. I realy wishe in the whole of literotica if any story about seducing mother-in-law in the same way this story is written.
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