All Comments on 'Rain Ch. 01'

A good story, but needs editing--BADLY!

work on this

nice story. carry on

It needs editing in the story. Make it more intimate, as this relation is very intimate. Make sure you continue.

Man this is beautiful story... Congrats. Keep writing.. I'm your fan now... i'll be waiting for your new stories :)

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It`s a nice story. very much erotic. Ilove this smooth kind pf love making with bhaby. Write more stories in which a smooth and heart felt love making sessions are occured. Don`t write rape or humilating stories. They aren`t erotic really.

Taking babhy in such a circumstances is nice. yes any babhi can accepts her devar in such a circumctances. It`s realistic.the smooth touchings and the caressing are good.spend much words on such romantic activities in ur stories. thanku once again.

I loved the way he removes the clothes of his bhabhi very few writes are able to write erotic stories of the indian context. I realy wishe in the whole of literotica if any story about seducing mother-in-law in the same way this story is written.

The interaction btwn BHABHI & DEVAR was depicted way above my expectations. That includes the love making scene. Bravo!