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Um?
Unreadable. Completely and totally. Spelling and word usage was completely wrong. Many of the words you used didn't make any sense in the context that you used them in.
Ouch
It's too hard to read and often makes no sense. It could have been a great story, but it needs some cleaning up and some elaborations here and there because often I don't quite understand your descriptions...
Wow
This is the type of vampire erotica I have been talking about. I absolutely loved it, and found that I understood it completely, even with the very few missteps in your grammer. I am a very picky person when it comes to grammer, but the story itself over-rode any grammer issues for me. Keep up the good work, and don't take bad comments to heart.
Amazing story
very well written, esp if you clean it up. and grammAr too!
!!!!
oh wow, this was AWESOME!!! and any of u who didnt like it have serious probs, cause this ROCKED!!! vamps RULE!!!wish we coulda known what happened with the chick @ the end, though.XD
Wow.
You may want to consider returning to English 101.
Grammer Freaks, GET OVER IT
Wonderful story, that is the point I look for. I could care less about grammer or misplaced comma's, or any of that other bullshit so long as the story is good, and it was.
Rock on dude
loved it, ignore the whiney bitches who complain about english 101.
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