Wonderful story!! Would love to see several more chapters!
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Anonymous10/22/13
what.
This story was so poorly written I got turned off reading it. Work on your writing skills.
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Anonymous04/12/14
ugh....
first of all... i will post my email at the bottom due to the fact that i am forced to be anonymous... your characters have no feeling. there was no emotion or build up to add suspence to what they were doing. i had to stop reading it because just when i thought there was going to be some build up BAM they are ALL OF A SUDDEN all into each other. i feel there could have been some hesitation to play off of that would have made this a more pleasurable read. perhaps a little background history of the dad and daughter. just seemed like there was ALOT missing that would have kept me intrested. sorry
demonicbear.tb@gmail..com
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Anonymous06/19/16
Really sexy story, loved it!!!
The only better thing would have been him impregnating her and living as husband and wife!!!
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Anonymous01/30/17
Pretty good!! A few oddities though.. He has sex gel, but no condoms in the night stand? Hehe... And she wears baggy clothes, never dates and never goes out but she's a deep throat blowjob queen?! Rofl!!
...and Ive never gone from one finger then straight to pushing my cock in a virgin ass and had her yell 'YES YES!!' Lol!
That fun aside, it was enjoyable!
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Daddys and daughters
Wonderful story!! Would love to see several more chapters!
what.
This story was so poorly written I got turned off reading it. Work on your writing skills.
ugh....
first of all... i will post my email at the bottom due to the fact that i am forced to be anonymous... your characters have no feeling. there was no emotion or build up to add suspence to what they were doing. i had to stop reading it because just when i thought there was going to be some build up BAM they are ALL OF A SUDDEN all into each other. i feel there could have been some hesitation to play off of that would have made this a more pleasurable read. perhaps a little background history of the dad and daughter. just seemed like there was ALOT missing that would have kept me intrested. sorry
demonicbear.tb@gmail..com
Really sexy story, loved it!!!
The only better thing would have been him impregnating her and living as husband and wife!!!
Pretty good!! A few oddities though.. He has sex gel, but no condoms in the night stand? Hehe... And she wears baggy clothes, never dates and never goes out but she's a deep throat blowjob queen?! Rofl!!
...and Ive never gone from one finger then straight to pushing my cock in a virgin ass and had her yell 'YES YES!!' Lol!
That fun aside, it was enjoyable!
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