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Jambled Rambling in Thailand

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by vampiredust06/12/06

I enjoyed

reading this prose poem of yours. Mentioned in today's new poem reviews

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by Anonymous06/12/06

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damn, quite a trip! feels like a flash fiction story to me, not that the label matters, just sayin' could work in that form.

I enjoyed the jellyfish scene, it was just the right size of a mouthful, and allowed a moment to pause and let the image and how that must have felt, sink in. Much of the rest of the poem was so fast paced it was hard for me to glean meaning beyond the story, which was entertaining, mind you.

one itty bitty nitty: I would say if you are going to cap. proper nouns, be consistant-- get em all.

rock on Mr. Nelson, good to see you here,

~annaswirls

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