Jim, you gave us the best interracial love story I have ever read on LITEROTICA. While to many (most?) incest is 'wrong' I can't help hoping that they stay together, however their initial relationship was tainted by prejudice and bigotry and they were brought together by lust and only lust so I see little hope for them. Altogether another well written and entertaining tale Jim. You should give us a few more chapters (her mother's reaction on meeting her son etc.) or at least a sequel but you simply can't leave us hanging! Pete.
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Anonymous06/22/06
did nothing for me
No wet spot, no high rating. The dialogue detracted from the sex, some mispunctuations and the rather flat epilogue put me off.
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Anonymous06/23/06
Excellent
Excellent
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Anonymous06/24/06
Stereotypical Crap
Your characters have no life at all. You might as well be writing about blow-up dolls for all the life you bring to them. You could have done something with this story, given the racial theme, but you’ve made it into the usual stereotypical crap you seem determined to bring to this site. There are authors who can take a well-used theme like this one and make it sound fresh. You’re not one of them. And you really need an editor. Periods end sentences within quotations, and names are separated by commas within dialogue.
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Anonymous08/06/06
i'm black and this story was great to me
it was raw and straight from real life.thanks for writing this story that way.
This was a wonderful story which I avoided reading for quite a while. Interracial sex in the South is a subject which I have never been comfortable with. Aside from the coincidence of Rod being Becky's half brother and the fact that he had a huge cock, this story is very realistic.
Nookiehunter
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Anonymous11/07/06
Fabulous story!
The plot was just the best! And the fact that even after she discovered the truth, she still couldn't stay away from his cock makes it even better!
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Anonymous01/03/07
Nice work, though disturbing
Its apparently extremely difficult to write interracial erotica free of the common stereotypes that have come to characerize the racial ecology of the US.
Perhaps that's why this story left me strangely dissatisfied. Considered purely as a "stroke" story it was well crafted and competently written.
OTOH, the writer has considerable talents and IMHO, could have done much more to develop the characters. I think it would have been even more arousing if instead of the Black male lead having the stereotypically huge dick cock which proves unbearably attractive to the little white Alabama girls, he could have had a normal sized dick. Or, even better, a small malformed dick. Now that would be something different.
And his white sister could have explored the repulsion/attraction she seemed to feel quite unrelated to the size and scope of his appendage. She never quite fully emerges as a character and its clear both of them have enough inherit interest that they could have received more development. I like dialogue as a means of character development and the writer clearly had the means to use that more fully than he did.
Don't get me wrong. I enjoyed the story and gave it a five as it was hot even if it did use the same hackneed stereotypes. I hope the author will revisit the story in a sequel or additional chapters, and present it more "realistically".
This is not meant as a put down. The story was well written despite the occasional grammatical misdeed (which, IAC, didn't detract from the overall quality of the story.
Nice work
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Anonymous01/26/07
Excellent interacial story
I'm Mulatto myself, so I can appreciate the dynamics of this story. I used to be somewhat like Rod though my white mother kept me. I liked how Becky was portrayed as not completely regretful or apologetic. She spoke genuinely and truly throughout the entire story, and even the incest was more symbolic than erotic. It was such a good story that I didn't even begin to un-zip. Anyway, I'm sure I wouldn't be the only one to appreciate a sequel written with the same skill and intensity as this last one.
It was a great story. The tale was so good that the sex did not matter much. It was just really well written. My only complaint would be the characters, Rod had so much personality that it stole from all the others.
I loved the story, even though the word nigger was used more than a couple times, which is more than it should be used if not used at all, but I loved it.I really liked the Rod character and how he protested against the white girls cause of his mother being white and abandoning him, but then fucking as many of them as possible just to make them feel like he did (an object of sex instead of a person).The sex with each of the girls and their latino lovers could've been alot more descriptive as well as the sex that Rod and Becky had, but I liked the teasing you did with the story.You've got a hell of an imagination on you.I'm waiting for a part 2 just to let you know.
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Anonymous10/27/07
Just as it would be.
Your combination of lust, love, loathing etc. is just right. When the writing is such, that it makes the reader feel they are right there; that they are a part of it, you become a soul writer. Able to reach right into the mind, heart, soul and even the organs of fulfilment and make them ache for their own to be tortured and finally sedated.
You offer some feelings, of this. Their hatred of the interracial prejudices; of his knowing who she was; of the jealousies and the coming to terms of their hastely made decisions. Go deeper. You'll be glad you did; and so will your readers. jim
They weren't huge, no giant Rod here, each had six and a half or seven inches, thick enough but not exceptional, but somehow they'd learned how to make love...and do it often! It was the best sex I'd ever had!
Somehow they learned to make love LOL
Like if there cocks are not Huge and Long and Thick they can't make love oh man get a fucking grip.
I love your stories, and this one is as great as the rest! I loved the tension between the characters but as a bit put off by the anger of the lead character. Still, I loved the story.
I Didn't Pay Attention to the Story Line that Indicated Making Love to a Black...
half-brother was the central theme, and I was wondering all through the story where the incest was to come from. So, even though the sex was great in the beginning, it obviously was not the main story line as each encounter was brief and undeveloped. Rod was surely to be the focus, but how was this to be incest? I should have seen it coming, but didn't, so the story twist, the source of his anger, and the eventual conclusion made a sexy story or a sex story much more dramatic and erotic. I like this kind - where the unexpected becomes the expected and the unnatural, the natural. Somehow I don't think this one can end until mother and child become one. She didn't abort the unwanted one (praise be!) or was he so unwanted? Mother, daughter, and now son need to be united in lust and love. Thanks, Jim for another outstanding story. Why, I wonder, does Becky share your name?
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Anonymous08/23/10
Great Story
I just gotta say... I fucking LOVE Rodney!! Becky is cute too. and I especially love the love-hate relationship they have. It's really funny. Great job! :-D
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Anonymous10/11/10
MORE
WHEN ARE YOU WRITING PART TWO?
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Anonymous12/02/10
I Need A Proper Ending
I really loved this story but I need a a proper ending... I agree all involved should come together. So will be waiting for part 2! Thank you!
Okay, I read ALL of your stories, I vote every one of them, all 5s or 4s. It's simple, just give us, your public, another part, PLEASE???????
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Anonymous01/07/11
Love your work Scouries !!!
It has been too long ~ but where did that 15 + part story go that I loved so much ? The brother and sister and the mountains ??? I can't remember the name of it ....
i liked the story i dont guess there is ever going to be a sequel i would like to find out what happens between becky and mom reguarding rod see if they can work things out get her side of the story but if not id like to see dad ask whats going on then becky tells her dad and grandpa in front of mom "just ask mom" then storms out carrying the few things she is taking cause a real scene id like a happy ending as always but having a few bumps along the way are sometimes fun .... especially if its funny lol
I think it makes a perfect story if we find out why Becky's mum did what she did what happened with her brother and her. It's still a good read as it is but somehow left slightly unfulfiling not knowing what happened in the end.
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Anonymous09/17/11
nice
your family if true is my type of read pleasssseeee give us morreee
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Anonymous02/06/12
Wow
What a story. Continue further and let me not keep guessing.
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Anonymous04/08/12
To be continued ? ...
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Anonymous04/14/12
BITCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
No niggers it hats socially incorrect and what in jell os wrong with a black guy and or female
that's right nothing I'd bet our a lil white bitch uuurgh racist people like u make me sick you completely ruined the mood for me and my what u called after saying nigger my 'person of color ' boyfriend much like my self BITCH
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Anonymous06/14/12
FOOKING LOVERLEY
Now that was an absolutely delicious story. I certainly enjoyed every bit of it. Can't wait to read the other stories. Just keep it up... ahem... the stories I mean.
What a sexy story! I have read this hot piece of work three times and have enjoyed it every time despite the racial slurs, which I find did not detract from the overall flow.
Although I hope for a follow-up, I do not think it will be forthcoming as it has been years since you've written it. Thanks for sharing!
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Anonymous12/10/15
I wanted no...needed more! To just tease me like that...naughty just naughty you need a spanking
Hybrid of Mischievousness, Carnality and dash of insightfulness
Some parts,we're clunky and dragged. I think just having one bestie instead of three very minor friend characters would have streamlined story. But the tale did gather itself , gain momentum and then liftoff. Strong conclusion brought it all home.
English
thank you for writing this story
one of the best interracial love story i read.no crazy snuff.two people who love each other.you told this story like a man with common sense thanks.
excellent
finally, a story that sounds realistic...well written and very erotic.
impressive
loved the tension, the agony... waiting for the dilemma in the title to actually follow through in the story... very well-written and interesting.
and, sigh, even though it's 'wrong' (incestually speaking) for them to be together, part of me hopes they work it out...
great job!
Excellent
You did a great job showing the thin line between anger and love...the anger drove the sexuality in this story!
good story but started too slow
I enjoyed reading this story once you got into it but I was almost ready to find another story before you did.
One of your best tales !!!
Jim, you gave us the best interracial love story I have ever read on LITEROTICA. While to many (most?) incest is 'wrong' I can't help hoping that they stay together, however their initial relationship was tainted by prejudice and bigotry and they were brought together by lust and only lust so I see little hope for them. Altogether another well written and entertaining tale Jim. You should give us a few more chapters (her mother's reaction on meeting her son etc.) or at least a sequel but you simply can't leave us hanging! Pete.
did nothing for me
No wet spot, no high rating. The dialogue detracted from the sex, some mispunctuations and the rather flat epilogue put me off.
Excellent
Excellent
Stereotypical Crap
Your characters have no life at all. You might as well be writing about blow-up dolls for all the life you bring to them. You could have done something with this story, given the racial theme, but you’ve made it into the usual stereotypical crap you seem determined to bring to this site. There are authors who can take a well-used theme like this one and make it sound fresh. You’re not one of them. And you really need an editor. Periods end sentences within quotations, and names are separated by commas within dialogue.
i'm black and this story was great to me
it was raw and straight from real life.thanks for writing this story that way.
Interracial Sex in the South
This was a wonderful story which I avoided reading for quite a while. Interracial sex in the South is a subject which I have never been comfortable with. Aside from the coincidence of Rod being Becky's half brother and the fact that he had a huge cock, this story is very realistic.
Nookiehunter
Fabulous story!
The plot was just the best! And the fact that even after she discovered the truth, she still couldn't stay away from his cock makes it even better!
Nice work, though disturbing
Its apparently extremely difficult to write interracial erotica free of the common stereotypes that have come to characerize the racial ecology of the US.
Perhaps that's why this story left me strangely dissatisfied. Considered purely as a "stroke" story it was well crafted and competently written.
OTOH, the writer has considerable talents and IMHO, could have done much more to develop the characters. I think it would have been even more arousing if instead of the Black male lead having the stereotypically huge dick cock which proves unbearably attractive to the little white Alabama girls, he could have had a normal sized dick. Or, even better, a small malformed dick. Now that would be something different.
And his white sister could have explored the repulsion/attraction she seemed to feel quite unrelated to the size and scope of his appendage. She never quite fully emerges as a character and its clear both of them have enough inherit interest that they could have received more development. I like dialogue as a means of character development and the writer clearly had the means to use that more fully than he did.
Don't get me wrong. I enjoyed the story and gave it a five as it was hot even if it did use the same hackneed stereotypes. I hope the author will revisit the story in a sequel or additional chapters, and present it more "realistically".
This is not meant as a put down. The story was well written despite the occasional grammatical misdeed (which, IAC, didn't detract from the overall quality of the story.
Nice work
Excellent interacial story
I'm Mulatto myself, so I can appreciate the dynamics of this story. I used to be somewhat like Rod though my white mother kept me. I liked how Becky was portrayed as not completely regretful or apologetic. She spoke genuinely and truly throughout the entire story, and even the incest was more symbolic than erotic. It was such a good story that I didn't even begin to un-zip. Anyway, I'm sure I wouldn't be the only one to appreciate a sequel written with the same skill and intensity as this last one.
Delicious
Good Story......needs a part II
PART DEUX
I agree delish
Damn good
It was a great story. The tale was so good that the sex did not matter much. It was just really well written. My only complaint would be the characters, Rod had so much personality that it stole from all the others.
That was great
I loved the story, even though the word nigger was used more than a couple times, which is more than it should be used if not used at all, but I loved it.I really liked the Rod character and how he protested against the white girls cause of his mother being white and abandoning him, but then fucking as many of them as possible just to make them feel like he did (an object of sex instead of a person).The sex with each of the girls and their latino lovers could've been alot more descriptive as well as the sex that Rod and Becky had, but I liked the teasing you did with the story.You've got a hell of an imagination on you.I'm waiting for a part 2 just to let you know.
Just as it would be.
Your combination of lust, love, loathing etc. is just right. When the writing is such, that it makes the reader feel they are right there; that they are a part of it, you become a soul writer. Able to reach right into the mind, heart, soul and even the organs of fulfilment and make them ache for their own to be tortured and finally sedated.
You offer some feelings, of this. Their hatred of the interracial prejudices; of his knowing who she was; of the jealousies and the coming to terms of their hastely made decisions. Go deeper. You'll be glad you did; and so will your readers. jim
What a load of crap
They weren't huge, no giant Rod here, each had six and a half or seven inches, thick enough but not exceptional, but somehow they'd learned how to make love...and do it often! It was the best sex I'd ever had!
Somehow they learned to make love LOL
Like if there cocks are not Huge and Long and Thick they can't make love oh man get a fucking grip.
that's just f***ing ..
.. crazy.
My New Favorite Author
You are one helluva writer. How do you come up with this stuff? The characters, the plot, the storyline. Simply amazing!
only on ...
.. spring break !!! Wild 'n crazy !!! Another great story.
R
Wonderful!
I love your stories, and this one is as great as the rest! I loved the tension between the characters but as a bit put off by the anger of the lead character. Still, I loved the story.
Keep writing!
-Monica C.
I Didn't Pay Attention to the Story Line that Indicated Making Love to a Black...
half-brother was the central theme, and I was wondering all through the story where the incest was to come from. So, even though the sex was great in the beginning, it obviously was not the main story line as each encounter was brief and undeveloped. Rod was surely to be the focus, but how was this to be incest? I should have seen it coming, but didn't, so the story twist, the source of his anger, and the eventual conclusion made a sexy story or a sex story much more dramatic and erotic. I like this kind - where the unexpected becomes the expected and the unnatural, the natural. Somehow I don't think this one can end until mother and child become one. She didn't abort the unwanted one (praise be!) or was he so unwanted? Mother, daughter, and now son need to be united in lust and love. Thanks, Jim for another outstanding story. Why, I wonder, does Becky share your name?
Great Story
I just gotta say... I fucking LOVE Rodney!! Becky is cute too. and I especially love the love-hate relationship they have. It's really funny. Great job! :-D
MORE
WHEN ARE YOU WRITING PART TWO?
I Need A Proper Ending
I really loved this story but I need a a proper ending... I agree all involved should come together. So will be waiting for part 2! Thank you!
PART 2 REQUIRED
Okay, I read ALL of your stories, I vote every one of them, all 5s or 4s. It's simple, just give us, your public, another part, PLEASE???????
Love your work Scouries !!!
It has been too long ~ but where did that 15 + part story go that I loved so much ? The brother and sister and the mountains ??? I can't remember the name of it ....
yeah im back haha
i liked the story i dont guess there is ever going to be a sequel i would like to find out what happens between becky and mom reguarding rod see if they can work things out get her side of the story but if not id like to see dad ask whats going on then becky tells her dad and grandpa in front of mom "just ask mom" then storms out carrying the few things she is taking cause a real scene id like a happy ending as always but having a few bumps along the way are sometimes fun .... especially if its funny lol
I do want to know what happened ...
I think it makes a perfect story if we find out why Becky's mum did what she did what happened with her brother and her. It's still a good read as it is but somehow left slightly unfulfiling not knowing what happened in the end.
nice
your family if true is my type of read pleasssseeee give us morreee
Wow
What a story. Continue further and let me not keep guessing.
To be continued ? ...
BITCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
No niggers it hats socially incorrect and what in jell os wrong with a black guy and or female
that's right nothing I'd bet our a lil white bitch uuurgh racist people like u make me sick you completely ruined the mood for me and my what u called after saying nigger my 'person of color ' boyfriend much like my self BITCH
FOOKING LOVERLEY
Now that was an absolutely delicious story. I certainly enjoyed every bit of it. Can't wait to read the other stories. Just keep it up... ahem... the stories I mean.
encore
How about another story on this one
nice
Good storie
love the story. Could there be a follow up?
Kudos
What a sexy story! I have read this hot piece of work three times and have enjoyed it every time despite the racial slurs, which I find did not detract from the overall flow.
Although I hope for a follow-up, I do not think it will be forthcoming as it has been years since you've written it. Thanks for sharing!
I wanted no...needed more! To just tease me like that...naughty just naughty you need a spanking
Hybrid of Mischievousness, Carnality and dash of insightfulness
Some parts,we're clunky and dragged. I think just having one bestie instead of three very minor friend characters would have streamlined story. But the tale did gather itself , gain momentum and then liftoff. Strong conclusion brought it all home.
Full marks * * * * *
needed more
Great story but needed more details at the end
Back - White
Yes, perfect story of black, white and five gold stars.
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