this story was very hot, its what i like to read, please continue it, maybe have Mandy walk in and see him jerking off, and they do the mutual masturbateing thing? That storie was so Hot,,, Please keep it going.
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Anonymous07/01/06
Please continue!
This story has an excellent build up and leaves plenty of directions that the story can now go. It would be a crime to not develop the story into an excellent series of senarios where the characters can inter-react. I look forward to the next instalment.
I'd like to see where this story goes and how it develops, and definitely what kind of creative imagery writing about sex you come up with.
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Anonymous08/23/13
totally shitty
unbelievable and unrealistic seems she would have found a friend to live with instead of moving. as is it was totally rushed and not very interesting in any way.
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Anonymous10/09/15
bad
Wouldn't really calm that incest or taboo. Poor story line
English
What is next
You have to continue this story soon.
Continue!!
You HAVE to continue this story!!! It was hot!! Can't wait to read the next episode.
Pilot Approved
We are pleased to inform you that your pilot has been approved.
very hot
this story was very hot, its what i like to read, please continue it, maybe have Mandy walk in and see him jerking off, and they do the mutual masturbateing thing? That storie was so Hot,,, Please keep it going.
Please continue!
This story has an excellent build up and leaves plenty of directions that the story can now go. It would be a crime to not develop the story into an excellent series of senarios where the characters can inter-react. I look forward to the next instalment.
Thanks
You've been mentioned on the New Story Review Thread in the Author's Hangout Forum on Lit's Bulletin Board
Good story
good writing and good plot. keep up the good work.
Continue Immediately
You musn't stop now this one was GREAT
awesome!
great story, want much more!!!
also, would love to see a pic of girl that inspired such a hot tale!!
Wow
That was one of the best stories that I have read in a long time. Congratulations I cant wait for the next part please post soon.
Excellent
just bloody brilliant
thumbs up
i liked this a lot.. a pilot, a bit of a tease, but a great start. im not usually a series fan, but finishing out this plotline is a great idea.
love it
great story waiting for the sequel
More!
I want to see where this goes!
Great Start
This was a great start to what promises to be a wonderful story of sexy adventures. I started of hating it, but ended loving it.
Nookiehunter
fuck
what the fuck has this got to do with incest there was no incest what so ever what an asshole
Story sucks
The concept has some potential; but it wasn't realized in this submission.
A+
i liked it alot pants are 50 times smaller now he-he
Good Stuff
Great lead up to what would be a great story.
2 women & 2 men in the house could lead to much adventure.
Needs another few chapters
Don't stop now
I'd like to see where this story goes and how it develops, and definitely what kind of creative imagery writing about sex you come up with.
totally shitty
unbelievable and unrealistic seems she would have found a friend to live with instead of moving. as is it was totally rushed and not very interesting in any way.
bad
Wouldn't really calm that incest or taboo. Poor story line
I'm hooked
Good story, waiting for next chapter. Thanks
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