All Comments on 'Saving the Company Ch. 05'

I'd rate this series a 6 if I could! Great story, great ending. Loved it very much.

What a great ending. A lot of work went into getting it right. I would also rate it a six or better. I can't wait until your next story. Ron

However it needs quite a bit of editing.

I'm so glad you've finished...and in such a good way. I'm going to be sorry not to read further adventures since I enjoyed all involved so very much. Thank you for this. You did such a good job creating the characters and plot with a good mixture of chemistry, intelligence, common sense, humor, and conflict. I bid a bittersweet farewell to this one. Now, as for a story of Brad and Cherie in the early years....

HELL OF A STORY. SO INTO THE STORY, THE LACK OF SEX WAS OK. AND I TO WILL MISS THE FARTHER ADVENTURES OF THIS STORY. OK WHAT IS NEXT? AS YOU HAD A GOOD ONE HERE DON'T SEND A DUD STORY YOUR NEXT OUT THE GATE.

This chapter was a good ending to your story. Overall, this was one of the best stories on this site. I think you hit the nail on the head that trust is central to a happy and successful realtionship and marriage.

Regards, Boyd

well written, well thought out and i am reall sorry but it had to and but alas it had to be so. i look forward to your next piece

I was so happy to read the last chapter of this delightful tale of romance and passion. It was so well done and drew me into the characters. It is obvious that you put a lot of time into constructing this story. It was all worth the wait for this reader.

Thank you for the story and entertainment.

PT

Thank you thank you for getting us this latest chapter...well worth the wait (however impatient i am..heh). Good read and look forward to reading onto your next addition. Thanks again for allowing us to read you. respectfully fan in Texas naynay

This is a very good story of love among mature men and women. I really have enjoyed it.

Nookiehunter

I liked the story. A good soap opera type tale. What I found VERY distracting was the WAY overuse of eyebrows and eyeballs rising and rolling all over the place. The story was too wordy and caused me to skim over some parts.

Just my humble opinion

Z00time

This was a great story, well thought out...

My only complaint is that it went from first-person to third-person perspective a lot.

I will read you other stories, and I hope you come up with new ones soon

Great story! It's well written and once I started I couldn't stop until I'd finished.

Joe, thanks a lot for this reading pleasure you gave me. I enjoyed your story thoroughly. If you aren't a pro-writer as yet, you will be soon and get rich. Thanks again and good luck!

I stumbled onto this story and couldn't stop reading until the end. You are a superb writer. At times, I found myself skipping the sex parts just to find out what happens next in the story! Yeah, I know, crazy, huh?!

Thank you for a great story. Please continue to write about these people. Would love more.

Joe, I have only recently discovered your work and must congratulate you on this simply superb tale! The story is so well told and unlike most others on LITEROTICA has just the right balance love and sex to make it almost a masterpiece. You light the way for other writers with such a fine tale of love and corporate intrigue. Pete.

Before I read this incredible series, I was a 58 year old clueless male who did not understand what romance was nor how it can affect a relationship. My poor wife of 31 years must have been so lonely. I will begin changing this tonight by taking her out to dinner, to focus all of my attention on her, to actually listen to her, to get to know her, to understand her, to make her the most important thing in my life. She is a saint for not leaving me long ago. My focus in the bedroom will also change to focusing on her pleasure, not mine; that by focusing on her needs and desires instead of mine we will truly be making love, not having sex. You described beautiful ways to please her in the bedroom, how to give her the pleasure she has seldom received. Again, I thank you (and I hope my wife thanks you)!

Hi,

To be quite honest I actually postponed a lot of things I was supposed to do to finish reading the whole story. I laughed, I cried and empathised with the whole scenario. Being a nearly 50 yr old computer tech with a partner who is a little bit older than me I was surprised how easily I understood the business and the romance. It is not easy being in love with someone in your own office and trying to get them to admit they feel the same way. I totally understood Joe!

A great story and a great style - just need a proof reader occasionally. Wonderful talent continue the good work.

Really a nice story line and character develpoment. People that anyone would know and in whose shoes they could have been in.

Being mature too (just crossed the 50 border) I spent the whole eventing with your story and enjoyed it very much. Really, we matures are still teenagers again when love strikes again... Happy those who are still young at heart to let it happen.

Joe, I just read through the entire story after reading another of your tales. You have an interesting style and a good narrative ability. My only criticism is that you need to take the time to proofread and edit your stories a bit more carefully. A bit of attention to that area and you should be thinking of publishing. Jerry

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The plot was quick moving & I had to read all five parts without stopping. If it had been a book I couldn't have put it down. Just enough sex that fitted the plot to a tee.

Solid characters, believable, and a good love story inter-weaved. It was a story I couldn't stop reading and left me wanting more. I have since read some of your other story's and have come to the conclusion that you are a very good wordsmith. Keep up the good work !

What wonderful writing! Intriguing plot, real characters, I read the whole series in one sitting. Thank you.

It is now 5.20 am and I have just spent the last 6 hours reading your story once I started I couldn't stop, I just didn't want it to stop, I found the story line dragging me in and the characters were there in front of me and I felt like I was in the room with them. In a word "Brilliant", well done.

I couldn't put it down once I got started. You brought the characters to life and with depth! Your story line was excellant. I had to keep reading to find out what was going to happen. There were a few editing errors, but an excellant read! Thank you.

Couldn't put it down once I started reading! My compliments!

I enjoyed this story immensely. I like your writing style. The characters are believable and the story has a sense of reality that I think many can relate to. It's crisp, well-organized, and very easy to read. I appreciated the attention you gave to Bethany's struggle with her trust issues and finally her ability to not just acknowledge the love between she and Joe, but to accept it into her life. One thing I do have to say is that I tend to think the love-making 'scenes' in all of the stories in this site are over the top fiction. Still, it's entertaining and I guess that's why it's called sexual 'fantasy.'

Just a thought, but I think this story could be scripted into a romantic comedy. I'm trying to envision what actors would play who...

Awesome!! Cuddos to you!

FANTASTIC

Very interesting right from the start. The nice thing, there was a real story line not just a sexual one to maintain the interest of the reader. The sex was part of the story but not the entire story. Flow is excellent, story is believable, all parties involved had a significant part in the telling of the story. Even Gerty's part up to the very end. Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading more.

I totally agree with many of the comments previously made. I really enjoyed how you built the characters and their relationships. Superb.

ok just because i love to read i wish you got into some more with gerty and what happened to the trublemakers. other than that. I LOVED IT!!

Love it love it love it!!!!

Great story... I agree with one of your other commenters... I would've enjoyed the results from Gerty's research, and the resulting events.

This writer should be locked-up in an asylum ! Just deranged garbage!

"1*" !!!!!!!!!!!

Can't tell if trolling or just retarded

Two HUGE Thumbs-Up!

Really enjoyed this story, loved the twists and turns as it rolled along.

Fab story!

Now the tough words. Thou shall edit!

I liked it, thanks

My feelings about the whole Saving the Company story are easy to describe. I enjoyed the plot, the characters were fleshed out and alive, and the style is easy to read.

To be honest, I found the more sexual scenes less enjoyable than I first expected them to be. But that's not a bad thing; it's only because your story line was very much stronger than most other fiction on Literotica.

The only criticism I have - which is why I say "almost" completely enjoyable - is that the story needs to be edited to correct some spelling and grammar shortcomings. They do not get in the way of the story, but why be less than completely enjoyable?

The spelling errors are mostly difficult to spot using a spell-checker, because the resultant errors are still valid words. Just not the correct ones (example: where you wrote that she had her check on the pillow, I'm sure you meant cheek)

full of love and humour....loved the way the story about the company unfolded with all its twists and turns and the unfolding love of different characters......just a couple of name changes and some minor spellings but otherwise a very enjoyable read.....some of the graphic sex scenes seemed a bit out of place in this story but was glad that Joe and Bethany eventually worked it out.......mirrors how men and women must feel in real life when having been single for so long...I think is showed just the sort of things and emotions people must feel in real life and dealt with many of the questions and worries that must surely go through peoples minds so can full understand the reticence of Bethany.....as no one wants to make a mistake at that stage in ones life....I know just how they must feel having gone through similar doubts and worries and eventually breaking up as knew it just did not feel right....a great story - a great read and just loved the interaction of the characters in the office and their personal lives....well done....one of the better stories on here...

had to read it all the way through was surprise when i came to the end wanted it to go on and on

thanks again for a great story

The ONLY thing lacking is including Joe's daughter. GREAT story.

Enjoyed this whole series a lot!

I read this story the first time about seven months ago. It was just as enjoyable reading it the second time as it was the first time.

A lovely tale.

A wonderful writer spinning these beautiful fantasies.

authors here who knows the difference between the word "shutter" and the word "shudder".

Thank you for a wonderful story. Worth reading a second time.

done - thanks for your time and talent. Loooove a happy ending!

Actually, I have read the entire story and I am particularly very pleased with this story. In fact I think it's the best one I have read. You had a real plot, you obviously have more than a passing acquaintance with business structure. Very good character development. There were some grammatical errors. I blame that on spell checker. If it's a word it's a word, even if it's not being used in the right context. I hope you keep writing more.

Steve

really great job combining a story and sex. I liked the sex but i truly wanted to know what was gonna happen next. Fantastic job.

A superbly constructed and very believable story - thank you very much JoeDreamer for writing it. An object-lesson in how to mesh great sex seamlessly into a great storyline. I'm sorry to see you've put nothing up since 2014 and I hope you will restart again sometime in the future; meanwhile since this is the first of your submissions that I've read, I know what I'll be reading next, for a while!

Regards, Vince

really enjoyed this story, thank you for sharing it

Everyone laughs as if it's a stupid idea, but:

"If it's stupid and it works, it's not stupid."

... was what I thought I was going to need on this one, but after a short while the players fell into their places and it made for a very enjoyable story! Nice job JoeDreamer!

Good storie but you need an editor.

I agree. You really need to have someone edit your work. A good read could have been a great read.

for this "storie" (sic) needs on themselves!!! THis was a fantastic story. i favorited it. one of the best on this site. nice, romantic, great story, great sex. loved it!

I expressed my disgust in your mom's bed story and feel it only right I comment on a story that I felt was great. This was a wonderful paced story and you made the reader connect with the characters so much that I wish Helen and Sally's brother in law get a spin off story since they only came on at the end. This story had good sex scenes but showed it was more of the love that inspired the sex not unlike the previous story mentioned of just everyone fucking everyone. I hope you keep writing even if the story isn't what I like or find appealing because this story shows you have talent.

Very entertaining story. Thanks for sharing.

Terrific job of building your characters. I found myself wishing this was a mini series that I could watch so I could see exactly how beautiful Bethany really was.

Obviously there are always things that can be done better, but I gave this five stars and thought it was terrific.

I have been reading your stories for a month or so .

You are a very good writer and the best part is that your stories have lots of variations.

Different themes , different characters , different backgrounds . Common thing is a very good plot and nicely woven story.

I really thank you for sharing these stories with us .

Very well written and so much fun to read! Thank you!

It’s extremely rare that I skip the sex to keep reading the story. This was one of those times.

I thoroughly enjoyed your chapters and following the characters through their progression. Well done!

That must surely be a product of my advancing age. In any case, I thought it was a really good tale and gave each portion of it Five Stars!

And I agree with the previous Anon poster... the story and plot were so well done that I kind of skimmed over the sex, though the parts I read were also very good. 5*

You may have read this before, it has been on LITEROTICA for 15 years. I don't usually comment on stories this old, but this was well written. That said-there was not enough sex for it to be on this site-IMHO

I agree with old Wayne. I started to read this story and remembered reading a story of a high level manager that went to a competitor(or supplier) and ended up buying out the company with the backing of the supplier. I am not sure what story that was but this one was very good as well.

One of my favorite stories!!!

3rd time reading this, and I still have the same opinion, 5* I loved the pace and plot it is good to see that the sex does not overpower the storyline

Excellent, thanks

But do try to throttle back on the over exuberant use of the word "Amazing".

You are a good writer.

Wow, this was an excellent story. Well done, Joe.

One of the best stories I have read on this sight!

What an utterly fantastic story! I have been reading Lit stories for about 20 years now. I have commented on quite a few stories saying they were great. However, you have what I think, is the best story on Literotica! This story was funny, serious, erotic and dramatic. And this is the first time that I am saying this to anyone, this story should be made into a movie. It’s perfect for a movie. This story is the perfect screenplay for a movie. Now I’m going to have to read your other stories. Thank you for such a marvelous story.

5 stars. A very good well written story with only a few glaring words being used incorrectly. Probably auto correct. We will blame Otto anyway Poor old Otto Korrect.

it is good to read a story here that actually goes deep into peoples psyche. We learn of their inner struggles and triumphs. We learn why people are doing what they are doing.

It allows secondary characters like Sally to become real and likeable. She starts out as the office busybody spreading gossip and rumors and ends up being a nice kind well organized intelligent sensitive person who In think I would like.

Well done to the author.

Many stories on this site are merely a list of events, rather than explaining feelings and motives for actions. Many characters remain 2 dimensional cardboard cutouts.

And because I felt I got to know and to like the characters I would have liked the story to continue.

But at least there was a definite ending at a salient point that tied up most of the lose ends.

Many stories on this site seem to me to be born out of sudden flash of inspiration. So to tell the story there needs to be a beginning. So we get a beginning. And then there is the middle bit with the inspired idea.

And then. And then? And then it staggers to an incomplete unfinished ending coz no ending was ever planned.

Not so with this story. it did have a well executed ending (pun not intended)

overall a very good story, plot, characters, ending, just too much graphic sex. We all know how sex is, no need to explain it. To me anyway.

Great read!! Thanks!

The view expressed several times that the story contains too many figurative sex scenes, I do not agree : In relation to the total volume, this is only a small and IMVHO very appropriate proportion - apart from the fact that the descriptions are in my opinion quite tasteful and contained nothing "unusual" or even disgusting.

No, the story lived up to the name of this platform "Literotica" !

Chapeau - I love it !

Good story well told. Followed a logical progression with no abrupt changes of direction. Very enjoyable read Thank you.

Very very good story, logically written, I love the character development and the fact that not everyone was friendly at the start made for a truly engaging tale. Superb

Great conclusion to the story.