homeToys & MasturbationNature Wooed MePublic Comments

All Comments  for

Nature Wooed Me

byanthonyparallel©
All
Comments (3)
by Anonymous

If the above comment contains any ads, links, or breaks Literotica rules, please report it.
by Anonymous06/29/06

Not quite good

This story has too many language problems and too much inconsequential background to be seriously considered in this contest.

If the above comment contains any ads, links, or breaks Literotica rules, please report it.
by sack07/04/06

a masturbation story....

A very tenuous connection to the contest theme, I have a suspicion you live elsewhere than the United States. This is more like a draft than a polished story. Interesting idea but needs to be developed further to real keep the reader's attention.

If the above comment contains any ads, links, or breaks Literotica rules, please report it.
by jinglebobs07/06/06

verbosity

In the first paragraph you say "very overwhelming", for me, a thing is either ovewhelming or it isn't. However it didn't stop me enjoying the story. Thanks.
p.s. My tutor always said that the word VERY should be used sparingly in fiction; it indicates that the author can't find a single suitable word.

If the above comment contains any ads, links, or breaks Literotica rules, please report it.

Click here to leave your own comment on this submission!  or
Back to Nature Wooed Me  or
More submissions by anthonyparallel.

Add a
Comment

Post a public comment on this submission (click here to send private anonymous feedback to the author instead).

Post comment as (click to select):

You may also listen to a recording of the characters.

Preview comment

Forgot your password?

Please wait

Change picture

Your current user avatar, all sizes:

Default size User Picture  Medium size User Picture  Small size User Picture  Tiny size User Picture

You have a new user avatar waiting for moderation.

Select new user avatar:

   Cancel