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by catalinaleon

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AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
Excellent writing

In obedience to convention I'll start with the criticism: The sex seemed a little detatched and clinical. Maybe it's a case of telling rather than showing.

Which perhaps really shouldn't be a problem--your writing is sensational in the first two-thirds of the story. I loved the warm, reflective, and very real thoughts the heroine has.

Keep up the good work.

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