I swear Lady Malachite, your story just leaving craving for more. I can't wait for your next chapter. I would rate it with a 200 on a scale to a 100. Keep it up.
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Anonymous10/04/10
Honestly
All Nick does is gasp, moan and beg, and I can honestly say he is probably the biggest wimp I've ever read about on this site so far. The experience for me simply felt like I was wasting my time, as we clearly don't see any development in Nick.
And seriously, what's with the masturbating all the time? I mean, not a minute goes by where he doesn't masturbate or something or other. However, what I don't particularly enjoy is that he mostly seems to do this when he is being humiliated in some form or other.
Basically, it's well written, and you clearly have lots of ideas, but the premise and the execution disgust me.
I hope that isn't too harsh, but that's honestly how I feel.
English
Oh, so decadent!
You should be so ashamed!
I loved it!
Keep it up! Keep us up! Keep writing, too!
Feakin GREAT!
Like he said, "Keep it up". This should get even more interesting.
OMG
I swear Lady Malachite, your story just leaving craving for more. I can't wait for your next chapter. I would rate it with a 200 on a scale to a 100. Keep it up.
Honestly
All Nick does is gasp, moan and beg, and I can honestly say he is probably the biggest wimp I've ever read about on this site so far. The experience for me simply felt like I was wasting my time, as we clearly don't see any development in Nick.
And seriously, what's with the masturbating all the time? I mean, not a minute goes by where he doesn't masturbate or something or other. However, what I don't particularly enjoy is that he mostly seems to do this when he is being humiliated in some form or other.
Basically, it's well written, and you clearly have lots of ideas, but the premise and the execution disgust me.
I hope that isn't too harsh, but that's honestly how I feel.
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