All Comments on 'Sucking at the Picnic'

Enjoyed it....was hard from the beginning!!

Where is Hank when I need him?

in desperate need of editing

liked the story, but it needs some serious editing. many sentences jump between first and third person.

Why can't I arrange that??

This story does not jump between the first and third person at all. It's first person narrative the whole way through. I'm not so sure you KNOW what third person narrative is. Perhaps you should read up on it before you go slagging someone's story.

- great concept, bullfrogts. I'd love you to keep going with this man's induction into a wonderful work of cock.

thanks for the support.

actually, I started the story in third person, then changed it to first person when I was a few paragraphs in. I'm pretty sure I got all the pronouns fixed, but it's possible I missed a couple.

But hey, I'm always interested in constructive criticism.

I'm straight, but this is the best story I've read in months. I love the exhibitionism angle. WOW, being watched by your wife and women friends.

I'm straight, but this is the best story I've read in months. I love the exhibitionism angle. WOW, being watched by your wife and women friends.

"*My* cock was now half-hard in *his* shorts..."

"I began wondering if I could find a place private enough to whip out his cock..."

If this isn't an example of a poorly written draft, I don't know what is. And these two were just in the first couple of paragraphs. Sheesh!

so sue me.

It was excellent, very hot. I loved the added element of the watching females. Never mind the catty comments about the first person/third person. This isn't freshman comp. Give us a follow up. How does she make it a long summer?What will she make him do next?

we need more

Very nice story/fantacy of mine. I would be on top of the world to have a man fuck me while I suck another ones dick. And to have my wife watch, man, that makes me want to cum right now. Keep up the good stories...

the husband was similar to me he looked like me

this is sooo hot. im a closet fag and would love my girl to cacth me taking cock from two gays.i came so hard reading this

Iloved it . . . . shot my load everywhere!

The story was good but had too many typos in the beginning. this made it hard to read at first. But over all good story

Your story really hit home for me. I'm a closet fag who loves sucking cock and getting fucked. I would love it if my wife caught me with cocks in my mouth and in my man-cunt. It would be so hot and such a turn on to have my wife and her friends watch me enjoying sex with men, like I do all the time. Please tell us what happens next.

I too a closet fag who really loves sucking cock......licking hard balls and fingering a nice tight ass. Love to run my tongue around a cock head......and then just sucking on the head until he shoots a hot load of cum.

before we got married my wife..caught me jo to gay porn i didnt see her ...when i started cummin ..she says...so u like dick...alll i could say was...yes...we talked about it...shetells me shes bi also...andshe wanted a 3som and to watch me suck a guy..so i got my hs suck buddy to come over ...i suck his cock for about 10 min then mywife tells him to fuck her..she cums harder then i everseen,,his dick is a couple inchs longer and its thicker..after he s done she ask him to suck me..he tells her hedoesnt do that anmore..shesays oh well..honey..suck his dick for me again..so i do...after that night..she start bringn guys home for me to suck

stuck four fingers up my ass to day ..i pumped my load of a bridge on to the public below.? piss funny.?

"....my cocksucking husband" - music to my ears, loved it!

Marti

I wish my wife would catch me sucking a big cock and having one fucking my ass at the same time. That would allow me to let everyone know that I'm a faggot cocksucker who only wants cock from now on. Your story has inspired me to "accidentally" have my wife catch me "in the act". Can't wait to read your other stories.

What a dream cum true that scenario would be. I hope

That my first is just like that, with or without my wife.

Who ever gets that lucky?

I loved this story because it reminds me that I too am a closet faggot cocksucker. I would love it if my wife and her hot friends would watch me sucking cock and getting fucked. I really want to come out of the closet and let the whole world know that I'm a fag, that I'm gay, that I want only cock - in my mouth and in my man-pussy. Your story has inspired me to let my wife catch me sucking cock. Wish me luck !!!

"So, do you like that, Tom?" my wife demanded, her voice showing more than a hint of anger. "Do you like sucking cock, you fagot cocksucker?"

The word fagot is a real turn on for me.

you're about to find out how it feels to have a big cock shoot cum in your mouth. Go on, fuck his ass hard. Make him feel it!" She shouted at Hank.

I couds almost feel him breed me.

"Oh, don't wipe that off, sonny boy. That's going to be your punishment for today. I'll think of something new tomorrow."

More tomorrow! What could be better?

This was a very hot story!!! I loved it. Wish I were there with them.

Very, very hot. I wish my wife could catch me like that. would like to know what happens next

getting caught to me is a real turn on, my gf was on my computer one day and found some gay video's in a folder. She didn't say anything until one night she said she invited a friend over for dinner. He did show up, dinner was fun and pleasant, she said she made a special desert for me, she asked her friend to help carry the tray in. They came to the dinner table, my gf smiling and her friend carrying a towel covered tray. She said this something just special for me, she grabbed the towel and pulled it off. To my surprise his cock which had to be at least 9 inches, cut and hard was on the serving tray. She tells me to eat my desert, then tells me that she found some gay porn on my computer and.....

My wife caught me kissing a guy at a party one night , she was shocked but thought we was just playing around cause we where drunk. What she didn't know that I had just sucked him off in the restroom , found out later he works with my wife . So to keep him from telling her we meet up at a local park once or twice a week so I can suck him off or if I'm really horny we go into the woods so he can fuck me raw.

Just like some of the other readers, I too am a closet fag. I'm married but my wife and I rarely have sex. I much prefer gay sex. I love sucking cock and for the past 2 years I've been getting fucked. I'm a closet faggot and I'd love it if my wife caught me. Then I could come out of the closet and let the whole world know that I'm gay. Wish me luck when I tell my wife.

and would love to hear my wife call me a fagot cock sucker as I suck of a group of men for her enjoyment

4yourpleasureiam

II love sucking cock and eating cum, and I want to get fucked while sucking a huge cock soon.

Great chapter 1. Now we'll read chapter 2. Things getting hot and wet Xoxoxoxox Annette

Great story.

Only two things could have made it better for me.

One would be for the story to be stretched out more, with more conflict for the husband, torn between his lust and the potential humiliation over whether to participate in such a "public" situation. I mean, you said he'd never even thought of another guy sexually, before this. So, fast leap #1.

Then, I would have liked to have seen more shock and disgust on the part of the wife, as you said she wanted to leave, but her friend wouldn't let her. So, she's initially humiliated herself and gets into it a little too quickly also. Fast leap #2.

I am big into humiliation. The more taunts and name-calling, the more degradation, the better. The more people to witness my "shameful" behavior, the better. My fantasies always involve being stripped publicly and used. That's why I think this story is so great.

I would live it if my wife caught me sucking a cock while also being fucked by a well-hung man. I want her to know that I'm a faggot cocksucking bitch. Her friends being there too would be even hotter. Public humiliation is wonderful.

This is a great story just begging to be turned into a series with his wife taking control and making him into a cocksucking cuckold. Love to see some more chapters

There are too much need for humiliation. Why can't people just enjoy a good ass fuck or blow job.

That story made my dick rock hard imagining that it was happening to me R9ch

I am going to let her flow while reading that story. I join so many here who wish my wife and her friends were watching me being used by two hot men.

over a year later and I still love this story. 4yourpleasureiam

I wouldn't want to get caught but I'd LOVE to be Tom!

I don’t know whether or not I’d like to get caught, but I know for sure I’d like to get all sweaty between a couple of big cocks, and wear that cum with pride!

hot, i have sucked cock and been ass fucked about 10 times nbut never had two at once wish i did i wabt two now

pleasesignhere33@gmail.com Bob send me a note you can fuck me. bring friends for me to suck.

Hot story

The author kept jumping from 1st person to 3rd person within the same sentence... Sort of confusing. Get better and write another chapter please.

So I sucked cock in front of my first wife. She is now my ex, because of it.

I luv sucking cock for an audience, I have never sucked a guy off while he was sitting on a tailgate and have never been fucked, but now I want to do both at the same time !!!

Yours in TN Do Me !!!