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I always enjoy
reading the musings of bluerains and this poem is no exception...I especially enjoy the first verse with its moon tears and mangroves, and the third pulls things together and wraps up effectively...but maybe I would think about tweaking the middle 8, so to speak...I really enjoy the phrase "I search for the eyes of rain's unsung blues", but you don't have to listen to me...thanks, dear.
really nice
I like your use of the word mangroves and the lines about the piano, drums, etc in the last stanza. You could get rid of a few "ings" in the fist stanza.
Try something like this:
Feeling echoes falling
from the dark,
another tear drops
from the light of the moon
and wakes me like rain
that falls on the mangroves.
Sensual
Your words drip in my mind like the rain. Liked this, mentioned in today's new poem reviews
mix of blue rain
I become absorbed in your poetic words and enjoy your writes, (~_~) bows humble
Beautiful poem...
I love a nice soft falling rain
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So like the sad senuality of rain. Very nice.
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So like the sad senuality of rain. Very nice.
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