that I could only give 5 marks for this - the story was worth twice that!
I had to stop readng half-way through to relieve myself!
MORE, More, more............
...but probably not young girls going commando, else many of us would have red-hot loyalty cards. Not a bad piece at all, though I found some of the dialogue a little clunky(especially their first conversation, which read like a pair of ads in the "personals" column). Will definately have to take a look at your other entries.
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that I could only give 5 marks for this - the story was worth twice that!
I had to stop readng half-way through to relieve myself!
MORE, More, more............
Tesco does home deliveries, too...
...but probably not young girls going commando, else many of us would have red-hot loyalty cards. Not a bad piece at all, though I found some of the dialogue a little clunky(especially their first conversation, which read like a pair of ads in the "personals" column). Will definately have to take a look at your other entries.
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