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Well...
The plot is very romantic, which may explain how it ended up in here. I agree with you, though. It's better suited for EC because the Romance crowd is really big on the "Show, don't tell" philosophy concerning stories. You've done a lot of telling for this one, which is better for a sexy one-page EC piece than it is for a 4-6 page romance (that's the general length of the most popular stories in that category).
Anyway, congratulations on a great first story. I hope to see more from you in the future.
Excellent
This is a very,very good first story. I am not used to the ways of this forum, although I have been on others, so am just judging the story on its merit. The story is believable, it flows fluently, the actions are well described.
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