Party Of Five

What?

this is the first line of the story.

"I was having a small party of friends, when your wife called and said she'd be bringing her husband and that he might make for interesting entertainment"

"I" means a person male or female
"your wife called" that means the husband was present
"bring her husband" what?

Sounds like a party I'd love to attend.

Just another

Just another dumbass story about cruel selfish bitches and a wimp.

Flat

The tone and overall style is nice but everything was flat and cartoonish. There was no personality in any of the characters. This feels more like a script or story board rather than a story. This would work very well in a visual medium but in composition it falls short. I would love to see a fleshed out re-wright. Adding depth and drama would greatly enhance the story. Keep writing.