All Comments on 'Waking Up to Dawn'

with a good sense of suspense, and detailed writing that puts you right at the scene, a "fly on the wall". Bravo!

The gradual build up to the crescendo. The story just pulls you in. Terrific sexy story. Too bad that they couldn't have gotten together for a while but she was much too wild for him long term

--that little bittersweet twist.

Dang! Now I'm gonna have to go back and read your several other stories. Exquisite torture that will be, I'm sure. HOW can I allow you to do this to me!

Absoluteily the best I've read. Thanks!

Great build-up, terrific pay-off: a truly erotic journey.

Phenomenal writing. The most exquisite build-up I've had to suffer through in recent memory. En Extase manages to tease you beyond any rational limit. I'm sold, and now looking for more stories. Thanks a bunch!

Anyone who liked this, I highly recommend en_extase's other stories. They're consistently outstanding.

What makes you so good is that you understand that the hotness of a story involving a reluctant guy having sex is directly proportional to his unwillingness. If all a woman has to do is show her tits then they're immediately in the sack, the payoff is limited. Moral quandaries of the kind you lay out, whether it's being faithful to a girlfriend, or not wanting to betray a roommate, are outstanding for creating a buildup in sexual tension.

There's no physical abuse here, like EnCarta employs. No cartoonish figures like temptanddestroy (and both of those writers do a decent job within the 'reluctant guy' genre). Your stories are at least somewhat realistic scenarios, involving motivations which are completely reasonable to the characters you've introduced. While my own fantasies generally involve literary crutches such as the supernatural, aphrodisiacs, hypnosis, etc., you don't rely on any of that.

I am glad you had the main characters actually consummate sex. I would have felt more frustrated than entertained, otherwise. Great ending, too! What's interesting to me is that there wasn't a single kiss performed in the whole story. That's not bad or good...just interesting to me.

Anyway, your usual fantastic job. I really appreciate you sharing these stories with the rest of us, and I look forward to your next one.

No other word for it

As a woman who has been teasing cocks for over 20 years, I thought this story was exquisite from beginning to end! I masturbated to two orgasms reading this story. Thank you so much for this slice of erotica.

Alissa

I hope that one day you get around to writing the part where it _doesn't_ go quite that far so we can find out what could have been! :)

I loved the slow progression to the final climax.

amazing

Too bad the relationship ended. As Dawn said, I could see a lot of other places it could have gone. I'm looking forward to more stories from you.

Great stuff, keep it coming!

Excellent writing. Dawn was truly an incredible character. The build up was masterful. I was only a little disappointed with the ending being so short. I would have liked them to have had a more torrid and energetic climax to justify the intense teasing. I know the tease, the reluctance, and the awkward release were all in character, but I personally would have enjoyed it more if he had taken her passionately, releasing all that pent up desire. Regardless, great effort, wonderful writing. Keep it up.

This was, perhaps, my favorite story thusfar. The extraordinary tension you created between your characters was palpable. It was erotic and sexual and exciting. My only wish is for you to experiment further with a character such as Dawn. I hope you write again soon.

Tease to the n'th degree- wow. Now we need him to give Dawn a hard rough fuck. She is too sexy a character to lose

This was so exciting! It felt incredibly real and the way you just kept building up the tension was just.... Wow! Please keep up the terrific writing!

I have to say, that against what others think, the ending was perfect. You balanced the physical and mental aspects of this story so well, it gives me chills.

Gives a whole new meaning to the term "rising action."

While some comenters felt the ending was "short" or "akward" I belive that the stereotypical torrid love scene would have ruined the foucus of the psychological climax, which is the focus of this story.

The tension and pacing of the story was flawless.

I like the charicterization of zack and the protaganist, Zach seems a bit loutish makeing the main charicter seem more interesting by comparison and easier to identify with. Dawn is of course facinating but she is just barely on this side of beliveability. She seems so tottally sure of herself and without any sort of self doubt as to be fantastical. Her brief moments of uncertainty make it work but I am still concius of her being a charicter rather that seeming like a real person.

It would be interesting to see some shorts following her in different siituations with her a the protaganist to flesh out her charicter.

Anyways, thanks for the great story.

This story was brilliant right because she just kept taking him a bit further and further until she eventually gave him what he wanted. Brilliant. And not only did she give him what he wanted, even though she did it slowly, although at the end it was quick, she did it in such a way that it was just totally brilliant. Brilliant.

I found intersting parallels to the legendary M1ke's writing style, in particular the old favorite "She's a Tease," in which a neighbor "accidentally" goes all the way with her neighbor, M1ke.

Anyone else agree?

Wonderful! This story was recommended to me. And I'm so grateful it was. I loved the whole thing ~ sat here enraptured through it all.

One of the things I enjoyed the most was the insight into the main male character's thoughts and feelings. The obsessive pull she has on him, his resentment of that, his slight awestruck amazement of her balancing out the faint anger he has about her game playing. Getting turned on with him, feeling the anticipation and wonder build.

He's the gem in this story & it's a gem of storytelling. Thank you.

Well, I definately enjoyed this story. I really liked the ending, with him not having to lose his friendship, nor having an awkward walkin with his friend or anything of the like. I think you closed it well. As for the rest of the story, well, I don't leave comments on stories I don't like. I thoroughly enjoyed it and plan on reading more by you (there is more, right?).

Good God, y'all! That was some fun story. Absolutely LOVE the teasing. I can't get enough of this stuff. Dawn is ruthless and sexy. The shower scene had me cleaning up afterwards as well. AWESOME!

really superb, super-hot stuff. Love your stories - please write more!

HOT. I kinda wonder what would have happened if no one ever found out and they kept on bieng friends with benefits. but alas maybe the mystery is better.

Fuck me! That was one of the most erotic stories I have ever read. It was so real and you know how to draw your readers in so it is like we are actually there watching all the events unfold. Great character developemnet too. It was so real for me as I shared a house with a mate & his girlfriend's bod was magnifique. She used to flirt & flaunt herself in tight clothes & had the best arse I have ever seen. Unfortunately for me it never went the way of your story but its still a great fantasy - ah, shit happens & such is life. Thanks for a great read.

Awesome, most stories here are all "fuck, slut, whore," etc. Those are boring, it's like a bad 1-800 number. Your's was controlled and paced, something lacking in most other stories.

I'm a tease myself, and just reading about what Dawn was doing reminded me of similar situations I've been in... honestly, that was the hottest story I've read here in a long time, I'm saving it for future "reference"... keep writing!!!

Wow. That left me quaking just like them.

Brilliant, like all your other stories! You're one of the few authors who creates sexy male characters in every story. I can't wait for more!

Wow.

Coherent thought is beyond me right now.

Wow.

Your stories are incredible! Please keep writing xx

This one of the most erotic stories ever. This piece of erotica puts pornographic stories to shame, with all of its teasing. The teasing, without being annoying, makes it all the more satisfying in the end. Please write more!

that even the crack of dawn looks good to me! Man, i've never come across a girl like Dawn before...too bad! Thanks for the fantasy!

One of the best ever erotic story I read. THANK YOU.

The increasing sexual tension is great. I loved it.

that was brilliant...the chemistry and the flow was incredible. keep writing, i'm waiting for and wanting more!

truly a fabulous tease!

Some of the scenes reminded me of my own college time...you are a great story teller. nice rythm.

Perfect.

Simply speaking--awesome. Do keep giving your readers stories like those you have penned before........

So hot, I keep coming back to it, just perfect.

and hurt to type this. and it's all made that much worse because i can barely see for the moment.

all because i just came so hard.

thank you!

-under age and loving it.

That was amazing. Well done.

OMG... this was soo hot! The pacing and build-up to the climax.. It begs for a sequel!

Simply the best I've ever read, ever.

one of the best erotic stories i've ever read. Dawn is the hottest female i have ever read about in any story, erotic or not. she is the ultimate male fantasy. highlights were the shower scene and the massage.

i didn't want it to end!

Haven't even finished reading but I have to comment that it is brilliantly written, very realistic and has flawless build up. Awesome job, kep writing!

This has some of the most believable characters I've ever seen, and the pace is perfect. Excellent work.

very very good.

Matt

you make me cum every time

Begs for Sequel.......

Gary

Awe-so-fucking hot !!!

...six orgasms for me to finish just the words you wrote. Now I get to remember them for my own in days and nights to come. [Pun intended, I guess!]

Please be advised that you were granted admittance to the LITEROTICA 1000+ VOTE club today when your story “Waking Up To Dawn” recently received its 1000th vote.

You are the 81st author in the storied history of the site who have achieved this recognition – CONGRATULATIONS!

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you so bad.. i fell in lust with the shy character. made me want to fuck him so good..

This is an amazingly hot story which never fails to arouse me.

It certainly begs for a sequel!

The pace was perfect, the characters were great and I had to slow down time and again during the story, just to make it to the end.

VERY well done...I'll be looking for more of your work on here.

I am so jealous of him!

Very well written!

The perfect built-up. I masturbated two times before finishing it! Also, concerning Dawn, wonderful creation of character.

This was really bad ass. Just perfect amount of time for the story to develop then come to climax. Well done

I think I knew her in University... Great story!

you write exceptionally well... gr8 work

Dude this is just great ! the best story ever ! omg ! your the best writter ever !! write more like this !

Absolutely sizzling!!

One of the best amateur, erotic stories I have ever read. You write beautifully, comfortably, evocatively and in a grammatically correct way without ever coming across as trying to be 'clever'. The story idea itself was a massive turn-on and was wonderfully paced. I had planned to go to bed an hour ago, but was gripped (annoying as hell that Literotica don't have a 'print' function).

Anyway, I am registered here from way-back-when, but I can't be arsed looking for my long-forgotten login details. I am a professionally published author of erotic stories myself and if you would like me to kiss your ass some more then Google me up. You are far too good a writer to be giving it away for free (unless that is enough for you).

Congratulations and looking forward to discovering what else you have done.

Yours admiringly

Jonathan Philips

Yum!!

You are by far my favourite writer on this site. Thank you for you great stories

This is a really fantastic story!! It's pretty rare that I want to read one that goes over 2 pages, but I just kept hoping this one would go on and on.

Amazing. Im a woman and the story is really well-written. Came 5 times with it. hmmmmmmmmm

I loved it, I was hooked from the beginning, I think I had never read anything with a hard on.. ha ha

But Dawn's character is so irritating

The situations and predicaments you put the characters in were interesting and creative, albeit sometimes not believable. And while the roommate seemed to stutter every single sentence he spoke, he had a very interesting relationship with Dawn, and they clashed nicely. Great read!

I don't post comments unless I really really liked a story, and god I more than liked this story. The first story I've ever gone back and reread and had just as much fun as the first time I read it.

you matherfucker write something new already ! i read all your stories 3 times now !!

This was such a different story, really outstanding. The tease and temptation builds and was just really delicious, very well written, and very sexy.

You could write another great story.

Just came across this most excellent piece. Will be catching up (savoring) on your other works too. I notice this is one of your ealier stories and you haven't had another in the "Exh and Voy" category since. I will keeping wishing.

Thanks again for showing how it's done, RIGHT.

wow... i want to say that i just finished reading the fourth story in a row, and just..... wow. amazing writing, simply an amazing author.

I haven't read such magnificent erotica in at least 20 years. What a pleasure! You truly are an artist.

Great story, nice characters and scenario.. But the ending seemed a bit rushed ?

Yes! I cannot express myself in words. Great! Thank you.

Part of me is sad that Dawn disappeared from his life, but the facts would have eventually come out and wrecked his relationship with Zach, and there'd always be the possibility she'd do the very same thing with another guy. Was she actually planning to have sex that day, or just to fool around, maybe with a little spanking? Only Dawn knows the answer to that question: every step of this game followed her rules.

wonderful story with great playfulness. Thank you that was a true treat.

I don't care how much busy you are ! Write more stories like this , your the best ! I wish all the writers learn from you !

The story was hot, like, totally a turn on. I loved it. I completely enjoyed the fact that you didn't just jump right into the sex. I hate it when stories are written like that. I love a good build up and you did an amazing job.

Thank you, and I'll be reading more of your work soon.

S

Holy. Shit.

I sure hope you find Dawn again!! This left me breathless and wanting more!

Amazingly hot teasing story. Like everyone, I want you to run into Dawn again somewhere - maybe when she has a new boyfriend and you two can continue your play.

Loved the way you dragged out the teasing for so long, yet the story never felt like it was spinning its wheels. This one really raises the temperature in the room.

Patient writing, FAST reading. Nicely done!!

Thought I'd known a few foxy but demented teases in my misspent youth. But none can hold a candle to Dawn. Sure, the story has an incredibly simple premise, which makes it all the more impressive that 'Dawn' can rivet the reader's attention for so long. Mainly, I think that's thanks to some inspired writing and wonderful character development. Dawn walks a fine line between being unbearably enticing, and insufferably irritating. Just when you can't stand her anymore, she provides just enough release to keep the story charging ahead. Wonderful work!

Wow. Your stories are absolutely intoxicating. Dawn is the best tease I have ever had the pleasure of observing. Would love to see more of her or characters like her. I have been floored by every one of your stories so far and really hope to see even more uploads from you in 2012! 25 out of 5! Lol

Really good story. Loved the whole thing but esp. the ending. Keep it up!

I loved this story - it had me so hot and horny - I nearly couldnt finish it mmmmmmmmmmmm delicious sex in the end !!!

totally hottttt! Loved it !

One of the hottest stories I read! Well written!!!!

Loved it -- lots of buildup, and a very sexy heroine!

That was an AMAZING story! What build-up! The detail....just plain AWESOME!