Waking Up to Dawn

wow.....

So hot.

I'm not sure...

... not sure whether that is the best story I have read here because of the quality of the writing, or because of the perfectly pitched, teasing storyline. It's certainly one of those things, but I rather suspect it's both of them. The word 'exquisite' doesn't do the story justice and I thank you for all the hard work and the beautiful word-craft.

Great Read!

Really good story and very well written. Truly an excellent writer. Don't know how writer maintained composure while writing this first person account. Enjoy the first person writing and present tense compared to third person and past tense.

Crazy sexy story.

You completely drew me in and kept me riveted throughout the entire lascivious tale. Holy smokes......

Good story

Had a roommate and his girl was of Dawn's type.
Lost a friend over it. He was besotted, I moved, and she thought it was funny.
Ran into him months later - he dumped her but our friendship was never the same.
Good realism.

Thx

Oh my God.

I've reading Literotica stories for years, but this is the best and sexiest story I've ever read! It is beautifully written and the way that you just captivated me with your storytelling, I just could not draw myself away. Mindblowingly awesome! Whatever praise you get for this can never be enough!!!

great story, kept me reading to the end. Keep up the good stories!!!

Loved your story. My only regret is that the 2 of them didn't have more 'incidents'. I would have loved it to have been longer. Great job!

Thanks

Thanks for writing such good stories. I belong to and enjoy many story sites on the Internet. Your stories get the best feedback of any I post on these sites. This one has received the best feedback yet. Wicked stepsister was the previous best and giving it up was another popular one as well. Keep creating so I can kep sharing them. Thanks again.

OMG Tease Me More

That was so hot, the constant teasing, Dawn's pushing his boundries, knowing he would eventually cum in her. Not only was he locked in her trance, so was I.

MORE

The story was good but you should write some more about these characters

More !!

Man i've read all of your stories like 20 time each ! Write domething new already !!! Nothing turns me on than your stories !!! Please come back !!!!!

I agree

its a real shame it's been years since we've had a new story. Would be great to see another.

Pity about the ending

This was a great story until the last paragraph. Until then, the slow teasing between the two of them was wonderful. But the abrupt ending in just 4 lines spoilt it for me. It would have been nice to see Dawn coming back when Zack was out, or even to drag 'him' out with her; but to have Dawn just walk out and never return was a real anti climax. In an ideal worrd, it would have been nice for Dawn and 'him' to have ended up together, but maybe that's just me.
Anyhow, it's your story and for the best part of 4 pages I really enjoyed it.
Thanks!

Loved it

I loved the teasing and slow build up. I am sure it was well worth it

Wild!!!

Two comments:
1. The climax should have been more colorful, prolonged, detailed, and intense with less stupidity on his part. Could have used some oral and anal material, too. Good stuff.... Keep up the good work....

2. I, and I'm sure many others of both sexes, enjoyed a deliberate, wall-banging, mind blowing masturbation!!!....

Hello, What Did She Expect.

Very erotic, very real to life.
But what did she expect, she had him turned on to no end.
When he finally got into that lusted for pussy he was overwhelmed, and popped one off in her, prematurely I'm sure.
She should have stayed an let him fuck her a second time, as I would have, and knowing me a third.
She missed out and so did he.
Great story, this is what Literotica is all about.

Scorching

I read this tale some years ago, but I'd forgotten how incredibly hot it was. Whew. Great characters but it's the interaction between them that makes this story such a sizzler. The writing is unbelievably precise, controlled. Every word and sound adds to the intent. So much more than a story – it's a performance, subtly leading the reader on, in just the teasing way Dawn manipulates the fellas. Oh boy – it's a virtuoso performance alright. Bravo, a thousand times.

Delicious tease

Every scene was vividly realized. You invite us into the central character's head and cause us to simmer and stew as he does. Every bit of description like perfectly chosen spices and herbs, enhancing the flavor. And when it's all brought to a boil, you leave us drooling for more.

What a chef. I can't wait to dine at your table again.

Delicious!

Loved the entire story. Wished I was there. Hope there is a sequel.

fan of all en_extase work

Honestly my comment title says it all. I'm a fan of all en_extase's work. The build-up, the tease, the deviousness, and everything. It paints the most vivid picture and every buildup is tantalizing. I'd love more if the time comes for you to write again.

teasing carried too far usually hurts someone
Nobody cant tell me she did not plan something like this
As somebody else said Zach is better off without her

I really want to know...

...where Dawn went. It would be great if there was a part 2 where, a couple of years later and perhaps in a different town, our hero unexpectedly ran into Dawn. Our hero could continue some sort of relationship with Dawn. But its your story.

WOW

Another excellent, well told story. Thank you.

great

So very well written. I feel the emotion .. the suspense ... the CLIMAX.
Great writing.

The way she just left was pretty anticlimactic, not to mention very abrupt to the point of being a bit detrimental to the story as a whole.