The gradual build up to the crescendo. The story just pulls you in. Terrific sexy story. Too bad that they couldn't have gotten together for a while but she was much too wild for him long term
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Anonymous08/11/06
SO funny! SO sexy! And then, right at the end--
--that little bittersweet twist.
Dang! Now I'm gonna have to go back and read your several other stories. Exquisite torture that will be, I'm sure. HOW can I allow you to do this to me!
Phenomenal writing. The most exquisite build-up I've had to suffer through in recent memory. En Extase manages to tease you beyond any rational limit. I'm sold, and now looking for more stories. Thanks a bunch!
by
Anonymous08/11/06
Your usual outstanding effort.
Anyone who liked this, I highly recommend en_extase's other stories. They're consistently outstanding.
What makes you so good is that you understand that the hotness of a story involving a reluctant guy having sex is directly proportional to his unwillingness. If all a woman has to do is show her tits then they're immediately in the sack, the payoff is limited. Moral quandaries of the kind you lay out, whether it's being faithful to a girlfriend, or not wanting to betray a roommate, are outstanding for creating a buildup in sexual tension.
There's no physical abuse here, like EnCarta employs. No cartoonish figures like temptanddestroy (and both of those writers do a decent job within the 'reluctant guy' genre). Your stories are at least somewhat realistic scenarios, involving motivations which are completely reasonable to the characters you've introduced. While my own fantasies generally involve literary crutches such as the supernatural, aphrodisiacs, hypnosis, etc., you don't rely on any of that.
I am glad you had the main characters actually consummate sex. I would have felt more frustrated than entertained, otherwise. Great ending, too! What's interesting to me is that there wasn't a single kiss performed in the whole story. That's not bad or good...just interesting to me.
Anyway, your usual fantastic job. I really appreciate you sharing these stories with the rest of us, and I look forward to your next one.
As a woman who has been teasing cocks for over 20 years, I thought this story was exquisite from beginning to end! I masturbated to two orgasms reading this story. Thank you so much for this slice of erotica.
Alissa
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Anonymous08/12/06
Absolutely amazing!
I hope that one day you get around to writing the part where it _doesn't_ go quite that far so we can find out what could have been! :)
Excellent writing. Dawn was truly an incredible character. The build up was masterful. I was only a little disappointed with the ending being so short. I would have liked them to have had a more torrid and energetic climax to justify the intense teasing. I know the tease, the reluctance, and the awkward release were all in character, but I personally would have enjoyed it more if he had taken her passionately, releasing all that pent up desire. Regardless, great effort, wonderful writing. Keep it up.
by
Anonymous08/21/06
Sensational Story
This was, perhaps, my favorite story thusfar. The extraordinary tension you created between your characters was palpable. It was erotic and sexual and exciting. My only wish is for you to experiment further with a character such as Dawn. I hope you write again soon.
by
Anonymous10/24/06
Outstanding
Tease to the n'th degree- wow. Now we need him to give Dawn a hard rough fuck. She is too sexy a character to lose
by
Anonymous12/06/06
Wow!
This was so exciting! It felt incredibly real and the way you just kept building up the tension was just.... Wow! Please keep up the terrific writing!
I have to say, that against what others think, the ending was perfect. You balanced the physical and mental aspects of this story so well, it gives me chills.
by
Anonymous12/26/06
Fantastic
Gives a whole new meaning to the term "rising action."
While some comenters felt the ending was "short" or "akward" I belive that the stereotypical torrid love scene would have ruined the foucus of the psychological climax, which is the focus of this story.
The tension and pacing of the story was flawless.
I like the charicterization of zack and the protaganist, Zach seems a bit loutish makeing the main charicter seem more interesting by comparison and easier to identify with. Dawn is of course facinating but she is just barely on this side of beliveability. She seems so tottally sure of herself and without any sort of self doubt as to be fantastical. Her brief moments of uncertainty make it work but I am still concius of her being a charicter rather that seeming like a real person.
It would be interesting to see some shorts following her in different siituations with her a the protaganist to flesh out her charicter.
Anyways, thanks for the great story.
by
Anonymous02/04/07
Brilliant
This story was brilliant right because she just kept taking him a bit further and further until she eventually gave him what he wanted. Brilliant. And not only did she give him what he wanted, even though she did it slowly, although at the end it was quick, she did it in such a way that it was just totally brilliant. Brilliant.
by
Anonymous02/14/07
Influenced by M1ke?
I found intersting parallels to the legendary M1ke's writing style, in particular the old favorite "She's a Tease," in which a neighbor "accidentally" goes all the way with her neighbor, M1ke.
Anyone else agree?
by
03/02/07
Well deserved recommendation!
Wonderful! This story was recommended to me. And I'm so grateful it was. I loved the whole thing ~ sat here enraptured through it all.
One of the things I enjoyed the most was the insight into the main male character's thoughts and feelings. The obsessive pull she has on him, his resentment of that, his slight awestruck amazement of her balancing out the faint anger he has about her game playing. Getting turned on with him, feeling the anticipation and wonder build.
He's the gem in this story & it's a gem of storytelling. Thank you.
Well, I definately enjoyed this story. I really liked the ending, with him not having to lose his friendship, nor having an awkward walkin with his friend or anything of the like. I think you closed it well. As for the rest of the story, well, I don't leave comments on stories I don't like. I thoroughly enjoyed it and plan on reading more by you (there is more, right?).
Good God, y'all! That was some fun story. Absolutely LOVE the teasing. I can't get enough of this stuff. Dawn is ruthless and sexy. The shower scene had me cleaning up afterwards as well. AWESOME!
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Anonymous08/29/07
fantastic
really superb, super-hot stuff. Love your stories - please write more!
HOT. I kinda wonder what would have happened if no one ever found out and they kept on bieng friends with benefits. but alas maybe the mystery is better.
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Anonymous11/12/07
Totally Blew My Mind!
Fuck me! That was one of the most erotic stories I have ever read. It was so real and you know how to draw your readers in so it is like we are actually there watching all the events unfold. Great character developemnet too. It was so real for me as I shared a house with a mate & his girlfriend's bod was magnifique. She used to flirt & flaunt herself in tight clothes & had the best arse I have ever seen. Unfortunately for me it never went the way of your story but its still a great fantasy - ah, shit happens & such is life. Thanks for a great read.
Awesome, most stories here are all "fuck, slut, whore," etc. Those are boring, it's like a bad 1-800 number. Your's was controlled and paced, something lacking in most other stories.
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Anonymous11/20/07
I love it!
I'm a tease myself, and just reading about what Dawn was doing reminded me of similar situations I've been in... honestly, that was the hottest story I've read here in a long time, I'm saving it for future "reference"... keep writing!!!
Your stories are incredible! Please keep writing xx
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Anonymous03/06/08
Outstanding
This one of the most erotic stories ever. This piece of erotica puts pornographic stories to shame, with all of its teasing. The teasing, without being annoying, makes it all the more satisfying in the end. Please write more!
by
Anonymous03/13/08
i'm so horny
that even the crack of dawn looks good to me! Man, i've never come across a girl like Dawn before...too bad! Thanks for the fantasy!
by
Anonymous03/31/08
Masterpiece
One of the best ever erotic story I read. THANK YOU.
by
Anonymous04/08/08
Wow. So good I have to leave a comment
The increasing sexual tension is great. I loved it.
by
Anonymous04/13/08
nice
that was brilliant...the chemistry and the flow was incredible. keep writing, i'm waiting for and wanting more!
truly a fabulous tease!
Simply speaking--awesome. Do keep giving your readers stories like those you have penned before........
by
Anonymous06/21/08
Fantastic
So hot, I keep coming back to it, just perfect.
by
Anonymous09/04/08
my fingerss are shaking
and hurt to type this. and it's all made that much worse because i can barely see for the moment.
all because i just came so hard.
thank you!
-under age and loving it.
by
Anonymous09/20/08
Thank you
That was amazing. Well done.
by
Anonymous10/05/08
OMG
OMG... this was soo hot! The pacing and build-up to the climax.. It begs for a sequel!
by
Anonymous11/09/08
Epically Perfect
Simply the best I've ever read, ever.
by
Anonymous12/03/08
incredible
one of the best erotic stories i've ever read. Dawn is the hottest female i have ever read about in any story, erotic or not. she is the ultimate male fantasy. highlights were the shower scene and the massage.
i didn't want it to end!
by
Anonymous02/24/09
Loving it
Haven't even finished reading but I have to comment that it is brilliantly written, very realistic and has flawless build up. Awesome job, kep writing!
English
really excellent.....
with a good sense of suspense, and detailed writing that puts you right at the scene, a "fly on the wall". Bravo!
Wow
The gradual build up to the crescendo. The story just pulls you in. Terrific sexy story. Too bad that they couldn't have gotten together for a while but she was much too wild for him long term
SO funny! SO sexy! And then, right at the end--
--that little bittersweet twist.
Dang! Now I'm gonna have to go back and read your several other stories. Exquisite torture that will be, I'm sure. HOW can I allow you to do this to me!
The best
Absoluteily the best I've read. Thanks!
Excellent tale
Great build-up, terrific pay-off: a truly erotic journey.
Holy Cow!
Phenomenal writing. The most exquisite build-up I've had to suffer through in recent memory. En Extase manages to tease you beyond any rational limit. I'm sold, and now looking for more stories. Thanks a bunch!
Your usual outstanding effort.
Anyone who liked this, I highly recommend en_extase's other stories. They're consistently outstanding.
What makes you so good is that you understand that the hotness of a story involving a reluctant guy having sex is directly proportional to his unwillingness. If all a woman has to do is show her tits then they're immediately in the sack, the payoff is limited. Moral quandaries of the kind you lay out, whether it's being faithful to a girlfriend, or not wanting to betray a roommate, are outstanding for creating a buildup in sexual tension.
There's no physical abuse here, like EnCarta employs. No cartoonish figures like temptanddestroy (and both of those writers do a decent job within the 'reluctant guy' genre). Your stories are at least somewhat realistic scenarios, involving motivations which are completely reasonable to the characters you've introduced. While my own fantasies generally involve literary crutches such as the supernatural, aphrodisiacs, hypnosis, etc., you don't rely on any of that.
I am glad you had the main characters actually consummate sex. I would have felt more frustrated than entertained, otherwise. Great ending, too! What's interesting to me is that there wasn't a single kiss performed in the whole story. That's not bad or good...just interesting to me.
Anyway, your usual fantastic job. I really appreciate you sharing these stories with the rest of us, and I look forward to your next one.
Brilliant
No other word for it
Exquiste!
As a woman who has been teasing cocks for over 20 years, I thought this story was exquisite from beginning to end! I masturbated to two orgasms reading this story. Thank you so much for this slice of erotica.
Alissa
Absolutely amazing!
I hope that one day you get around to writing the part where it _doesn't_ go quite that far so we can find out what could have been! :)
Great build-up!
I loved the slow progression to the final climax.
wow
amazing
My favorite tease story ever
Too bad the relationship ended. As Dawn said, I could see a lot of other places it could have gone. I'm looking forward to more stories from you.
Out standing!
Great stuff, keep it coming!
No wonder this is a popular story...
Excellent writing. Dawn was truly an incredible character. The build up was masterful. I was only a little disappointed with the ending being so short. I would have liked them to have had a more torrid and energetic climax to justify the intense teasing. I know the tease, the reluctance, and the awkward release were all in character, but I personally would have enjoyed it more if he had taken her passionately, releasing all that pent up desire. Regardless, great effort, wonderful writing. Keep it up.
Sensational Story
This was, perhaps, my favorite story thusfar. The extraordinary tension you created between your characters was palpable. It was erotic and sexual and exciting. My only wish is for you to experiment further with a character such as Dawn. I hope you write again soon.
Outstanding
Tease to the n'th degree- wow. Now we need him to give Dawn a hard rough fuck. She is too sexy a character to lose
Wow!
This was so exciting! It felt incredibly real and the way you just kept building up the tension was just.... Wow! Please keep up the terrific writing!
Flawless
I have to say, that against what others think, the ending was perfect. You balanced the physical and mental aspects of this story so well, it gives me chills.
Fantastic
Gives a whole new meaning to the term "rising action."
While some comenters felt the ending was "short" or "akward" I belive that the stereotypical torrid love scene would have ruined the foucus of the psychological climax, which is the focus of this story.
The tension and pacing of the story was flawless.
I like the charicterization of zack and the protaganist, Zach seems a bit loutish makeing the main charicter seem more interesting by comparison and easier to identify with. Dawn is of course facinating but she is just barely on this side of beliveability. She seems so tottally sure of herself and without any sort of self doubt as to be fantastical. Her brief moments of uncertainty make it work but I am still concius of her being a charicter rather that seeming like a real person.
It would be interesting to see some shorts following her in different siituations with her a the protaganist to flesh out her charicter.
Anyways, thanks for the great story.
Brilliant
This story was brilliant right because she just kept taking him a bit further and further until she eventually gave him what he wanted. Brilliant. And not only did she give him what he wanted, even though she did it slowly, although at the end it was quick, she did it in such a way that it was just totally brilliant. Brilliant.
Influenced by M1ke?
I found intersting parallels to the legendary M1ke's writing style, in particular the old favorite "She's a Tease," in which a neighbor "accidentally" goes all the way with her neighbor, M1ke.
Anyone else agree?
Well deserved recommendation!
Wonderful! This story was recommended to me. And I'm so grateful it was. I loved the whole thing ~ sat here enraptured through it all.
One of the things I enjoyed the most was the insight into the main male character's thoughts and feelings. The obsessive pull she has on him, his resentment of that, his slight awestruck amazement of her balancing out the faint anger he has about her game playing. Getting turned on with him, feeling the anticipation and wonder build.
He's the gem in this story & it's a gem of storytelling. Thank you.
Gratifying
Well, I definately enjoyed this story. I really liked the ending, with him not having to lose his friendship, nor having an awkward walkin with his friend or anything of the like. I think you closed it well. As for the rest of the story, well, I don't leave comments on stories I don't like. I thoroughly enjoyed it and plan on reading more by you (there is more, right?).
Holy SHIT!!!!
Good God, y'all! That was some fun story. Absolutely LOVE the teasing. I can't get enough of this stuff. Dawn is ruthless and sexy. The shower scene had me cleaning up afterwards as well. AWESOME!
fantastic
really superb, super-hot stuff. Love your stories - please write more!
Me=Like
HOT. I kinda wonder what would have happened if no one ever found out and they kept on bieng friends with benefits. but alas maybe the mystery is better.
Totally Blew My Mind!
Fuck me! That was one of the most erotic stories I have ever read. It was so real and you know how to draw your readers in so it is like we are actually there watching all the events unfold. Great character developemnet too. It was so real for me as I shared a house with a mate & his girlfriend's bod was magnifique. She used to flirt & flaunt herself in tight clothes & had the best arse I have ever seen. Unfortunately for me it never went the way of your story but its still a great fantasy - ah, shit happens & such is life. Thanks for a great read.
great story
Awesome, most stories here are all "fuck, slut, whore," etc. Those are boring, it's like a bad 1-800 number. Your's was controlled and paced, something lacking in most other stories.
I love it!
I'm a tease myself, and just reading about what Dawn was doing reminded me of similar situations I've been in... honestly, that was the hottest story I've read here in a long time, I'm saving it for future "reference"... keep writing!!!
Hottest... story... ever
Wow. That left me quaking just like them.
Fantastic!
Brilliant, like all your other stories! You're one of the few authors who creates sexy male characters in every story. I can't wait for more!
Yikes.
Wow.
Coherent thought is beyond me right now.
Wow.
WOW
Your stories are incredible! Please keep writing xx
Outstanding
This one of the most erotic stories ever. This piece of erotica puts pornographic stories to shame, with all of its teasing. The teasing, without being annoying, makes it all the more satisfying in the end. Please write more!
i'm so horny
that even the crack of dawn looks good to me! Man, i've never come across a girl like Dawn before...too bad! Thanks for the fantasy!
Masterpiece
One of the best ever erotic story I read. THANK YOU.
Wow. So good I have to leave a comment
The increasing sexual tension is great. I loved it.
nice
that was brilliant...the chemistry and the flow was incredible. keep writing, i'm waiting for and wanting more!
truly a fabulous tease!
aaah sweet memories...
Some of the scenes reminded me of my own college time...you are a great story teller. nice rythm.
As always...
Perfect.
Whoopie!!!
Simply speaking--awesome. Do keep giving your readers stories like those you have penned before........
Fantastic
So hot, I keep coming back to it, just perfect.
my fingerss are shaking
and hurt to type this. and it's all made that much worse because i can barely see for the moment.
all because i just came so hard.
thank you!
-under age and loving it.
Thank you
That was amazing. Well done.
OMG
OMG... this was soo hot! The pacing and build-up to the climax.. It begs for a sequel!
Epically Perfect
Simply the best I've ever read, ever.
incredible
one of the best erotic stories i've ever read. Dawn is the hottest female i have ever read about in any story, erotic or not. she is the ultimate male fantasy. highlights were the shower scene and the massage.
i didn't want it to end!
Loving it
Haven't even finished reading but I have to comment that it is brilliantly written, very realistic and has flawless build up. Awesome job, kep writing!
Incredible writing
This has some of the most believable characters I've ever seen, and the pace is perfect. Excellent work.
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