I liked this story. You did a good job detailing what was going on. It would have been better if you had included more about their feelings. Try to get the reader to feel and see what is going on.
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Good story
I liked this story. You did a good job detailing what was going on. It would have been better if you had included more about their feelings. Try to get the reader to feel and see what is going on.
This story will be mentioned in the Authors hangout review thread on the forum.
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