This was a good short story. The only major thing I had a problem with was all the editing errors. It distracted me from your story. Just make sure you at least go over it or have someone else look it over.
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good, but needs editing
This was a good short story. The only major thing I had a problem with was all the editing errors. It distracted me from your story. Just make sure you at least go over it or have someone else look it over.
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