Tight plotting and excellent dialogue. This sexy little tale deserves, no, begs for, a sequel. Good job, MBF.
It's a fact. Old friendships renewed are solid gold. Thanks for reminding me ... helping me remember.
the story better if the history between them had been a touch less. Maybe only teen kissing and a hint of joint masturbation. That way this encounter would have been a little less obvious and more erotic.
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A Little Jewel
Tight plotting and excellent dialogue. This sexy little tale deserves, no, begs for, a sequel. Good job, MBF.
old friendships
It's a fact. Old friendships renewed are solid gold. Thanks for reminding me ... helping me remember.
I didn't finish it. I personally would have liked
the story better if the history between them had been a touch less. Maybe only teen kissing and a hint of joint masturbation.
That way this encounter would have been a little less obvious and more erotic.
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Back to Power Out or
More submissions by marybethf.