Your story had some real potential, but then you copped out and finished it up super quickly... lousy ending that ruined the story and the mood.
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Anonymous02/03/07
Good story...but..
Good Story... really good story... really turned me on... but it ended a little too early.. it really had tremendous potential to be a masterpiece...
Nevertheless, good story!
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Anonymous06/12/07
more?
come on they got to find each other again please it was just getting good, they could be like a top/bottom int the same house hold. but anywho it was great but eneded to early, if you ever add more to the story i'll be back.
what a great story and plot line.
really like how you left it open for a sequel.
very hot and well written
ty for your time to write this
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Anonymous02/13/08
Great story!
I really loved the story, it really shows how men take cheating so much harder than women, in a way. Atleast for me, you should try some kinkier stories next time including bondage, anyway great story. Looking forward to your next ones!
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Anonymous04/15/08
:)
A wanker... And ok as such...But no real story though :)Yoron
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Anonymous02/11/09
Brilliant!
Great story, really really enjoyed it!
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Anonymous03/11/09
Great story
I loved the entire story, but the little ending you added at the end made it seem like it was a true story which made for a bad ending
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Anonymous07/19/09
Fine story
the sad ending made this more than the average hot fantasy, i liked that sudden turn off.
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Anonymous11/17/09
One of the best stories on the site
I loved it. Totally engaging. Well thought out and sexy, dirty as hell. Perfect balance between keeping the excitement and letting the story unfold at a believeable natural pace. Please write more !!
Nice ending, it made me feel sorry for Larry, even though he cheated first and deserved to be a slave he didn't deserve finding out that Claire had had sex with Drew like that.
the series was going great till it ended the way it did, it ruined the mood of that you had been building in the story. thanks for the time it took to write, take care and be well.
English
had potential
Your story had some real potential, but then you copped out and finished it up super quickly... lousy ending that ruined the story and the mood.
Good story...but..
Good Story... really good story... really turned me on... but it ended a little too early.. it really had tremendous potential to be a masterpiece...
Nevertheless, good story!
more?
come on they got to find each other again please it was just getting good, they could be like a top/bottom int the same house hold. but anywho it was great but eneded to early, if you ever add more to the story i'll be back.
great story
what a great story and plot line.
really like how you left it open for a sequel.
very hot and well written
ty for your time to write this
Great story!
I really loved the story, it really shows how men take cheating so much harder than women, in a way. Atleast for me, you should try some kinkier stories next time including bondage, anyway great story. Looking forward to your next ones!
:)
A wanker... And ok as such...But no real story though :)Yoron
Brilliant!
Great story, really really enjoyed it!
Great story
I loved the entire story, but the little ending you added at the end made it seem like it was a true story which made for a bad ending
Fine story
the sad ending made this more than the average hot fantasy, i liked that sudden turn off.
One of the best stories on the site
I loved it. Totally engaging. Well thought out and sexy, dirty as hell. Perfect balance between keeping the excitement and letting the story unfold at a believeable natural pace. Please write more !!
nice
Nice ending, it made me feel sorry for Larry, even though he cheated first and deserved to be a slave he didn't deserve finding out that Claire had had sex with Drew like that.
okay story
the series was going great till it ended the way it did, it ruined the mood of that you had been building in the story. thanks for the time it took to write, take care and be well.
Unhappy Ending?!
Was great until the last couple of paragraphs...argh!
I loved it...
...up until the epilogue. Erase that and it's a really fabulous story.
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