Owning Pita Ch. 01

nice tempo

The flow of this story is excellent. It keeps you reading much like Joe keeps pita waiting for satisfaction. And the story does satisfy. It is neither too flowery nor too streamlined.

I would definitely read the entire story if it were available.

I feel almost as if we are sharing pita's training. As Joe excites us, his writing is smooth enough to soothe us, but teasing enough to keep his reading. He's definitely made me want to do what he says in that he wants me to keep reading. Yes, sir, will do.

Awesome story my Sir!!

I LOVE this story so much! Of course, it has nothing to do with my name being a part of the title and the author my Dom and lover. *smiles* I know how long and hard you have worked on this chapter and the one to follow. I have seen your ideas for the novel and it’s incredible. Thank you for letting me be a part of what I know will be a wonderful book someday. Your pita.

Wow!

Very well done. I'll be looking for Chapter 2. Pita is a lucky girl. :)

Superb Blend of Two Strong Genres

This is - without any doubt - one of the best stories I have had the good fortune to read in this particular genre. This is more than romance and more than a B&D tale.
This is a tale of two strong characters, drawing the reader - as well as each other! - in to a web of intrigue and eroticism.

Well-written with superb style and grace, as well as conflict and humor. Too often I've read B&D stories which became little more than an exercise in sterility - cold and technical how-to's, not much more than a connect the dots and bump and grind. Does nothing for Me, personally. But this -- this is better than good.

There is more going on here than a quick first read gives a reader and this reader still got a lot on that first read. But, like the lifestyle itself, and like romance as well, delving into "Owning Pita" again is a secondary, more complex journey - all the more thrilling as the subtlety of the tale rises to the top.

Creme de la creme.

Joe, do keep writing. Finish this up so We can hopefully have signed copies one day!

LM

I want to be Pita!!!

Sir, you have written a wonderful story full of romance,hope,and passion. The prelude was touching and the scene on the airplane delicous. I am eagerly awaiting chapter two so I can learn more about these characters that have sucked me in and made me feel like I already know them. Thank you!!

very well written

ST, you have definitely got to continue this saga. You have created and captured a wonderful character in pita and i hope we can look forward to further adventures in bdsm with her. thanks for the great read. lance gt

Stirring...romantic...sexy

The prelude was so enchanting, then the dream sequence...so hot. The airport scene: DELICIOUS!!!!!

I really like how you've fleshed out the characters and given them a life outside of sex. You're a very talented writer. I look forward to the next installment.

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I love the changes you made to get to this draft; the whole chapter has a much different feel, and you've done an excellent job delving into the characters and their relationship. I'm anxious to see what chapter 2 has in store!

Wow!!!

This is a fabulous story. I would have to say that it is my favorite. I keep returning to it. I sent the link to my new master who wanted to know what I liked. I can't wait to read more. Please don't stop writing.

Just beautiful

I'm also awaiting the next installment :-)

SN

Superb

A love story, an erotic story and an exploration of the D/s scene in one - what more could a reader ask for? I was reading to find out more about the characters and their lives, and not for the next "good bit" - which means that I will be back looking for more episodes.

Ridiculously Good

Dead serious - this was the first story I came across when I first visited literotica.com, and still my favorite - I hope you choose to continue with the next chapter! I'm waiting with baiting breath...

Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful!

Soft:

I found a reference to this story on one of the Boards and was inspired to look it up. I'm very glad I did! You have started a good story and - I look forward to reading more of it. It isn't too many stories in this field that have real chacter development but you do.

Thanks.

Subspace

Fantastic!! It was a story to send one to the subspace....eagerly looking forward to the next part!!

Erotically Brilliant

My Master requested i read Your story. He says that i remind Him of Pita. The way You take the reader thru her feelings and emotions as well as Your own is so delightful. To be able to see into the mind of a submissive as well as a Dominant is an exceptional feat. i want more, More, MORE! *ahem* please Sir.

Intriguing

I thought this story was well-written. The story was intriguing from start to finish and I was surprised at my "positive" physical reaction.

Amazing!

Well done! i couldn't stop reading from start to finish. Your words were a caress to a soul and i was touched mentally, emotionally and physically...

Thank You!
lanette

Very Imaginative!

I've never read anything like this before and found it romantic and exciting! Being able to read a person is a special gift. Being able to give them something they didn't realize they needed is masterful!

Joe, please instruct pita to inform me when the next chapter becomes available. As you have already discovered, she is a special sub. Continue your writing and complete your ownership........Coaster

Please finish

I've cried, been turned on and cried again! I can't wait to read what happens next!

*Wiggles*

Please, please, please, please, PLEASE!!! Please MORE!

Thank you!

Wow. What a wonderful read. Not only is this well written, but the complexity of your characters and the raw emotion you convey is so riveting that you've almost made a bdsm convert out of me! I will most certainly be looking out for the next chapter.

Great Story

This is a great story and I know I speak for many people when I say "Please write many more chapters"

eloquent writing.

I like the momentum and style. Also no bad grammar. Well done. Write some more!

wONDERFUL BDSM STORY

I really loved this story. Joe was very masterful, but vulnerable also. The author really does have a 'SOFTOUCH"

I'm nearly speechless... Loved it... I was so moved by the vulnerability of both, sub AND Dom!
It encourages me to search my own way and...

Really outstanding!
I'll wait eagerly for more chapters!

Please write more

Truly one of the best stories I have read on here in a long time.

My Yearning is Even Greater

This piece made me long anew for the love and intimacy of a D/s relationship. I've read it twice. It spoke to my lustful and romantic desires. Please write more.

Beautifully written but

Why the necessity to whip her bloody? Where do you draw the line--when she needs stitches?