All Comments on 'My Girlfriend, My Slave'

I really enjoyed the first story, but you need to spend more time on her sexual torture, desribing exactly what you do to her and how she reacts to it and begs for it.

I love the premise of the story and how you developed it after jumping right into it. The story would have been a lot better and deserved a 5-star rating if your obvious writing skills had been applied to exploring, developing and detailing the intricacies of the sex acts and especially the Scene involving the clothespin application and whipping. You used more words to describe the new whip (11) than you did the actual Scene (0). You are a better author than that.

I’m hoping you write at least one more chapter to this where you correct what I, and others, feel as weaknesses, maybe even including a flashback that allows you to revisit the Scene and actually describe it vs just referencing it.

Best of luck to you.