This story seems like it *could* be interesting, but
it's taking too long to get to the point. I don't
know how many chapters you're planning, but if many
more, they should each be long, and contain more
sexual encounters. These first two chapters really
should've been put together as one. That would've
seemed a little better, because it had the
dream and the masturbation from the Dr.
But even so, it's still dragged a bit. Since
this is put under incest, I assume that the kid will
be getting it on with his mother and/or sister, so
let's get to it already.
I got one hell of a laugh out of the beginnings of this story, and that makes it a one oh oh in my book. Watching all these fawning females gag on this kids perDICKament works just fine for me. I know it's about to get alot harder and hotter. Oh the PUNishment the female population is about to experience!
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Anonymous12/02/07
Getting better and better
This storie keeps getting better....you have got my full attention.... and I am very intrested in where this is going so far....
GREAT JOB SO FAR :-)
English
longer
love where the story is going...but pleeaase longer
BORING...
Get to it already. And where's the incest.
Taking a bit long
This story seems like it *could* be interesting, but
it's taking too long to get to the point. I don't
know how many chapters you're planning, but if many
more, they should each be long, and contain more
sexual encounters. These first two chapters really
should've been put together as one. That would've
seemed a little better, because it had the
dream and the masturbation from the Dr.
But even so, it's still dragged a bit. Since
this is put under incest, I assume that the kid will
be getting it on with his mother and/or sister, so
let's get to it already.
Don't fret...they're all wet..
I got one hell of a laugh out of the beginnings of this story, and that makes it a one oh oh in my book. Watching all these fawning females gag on this kids perDICKament works just fine for me. I know it's about to get alot harder and hotter. Oh the PUNishment the female population is about to experience!
Getting better and better
This storie keeps getting better....you have got my full attention.... and I am very intrested in where this is going so far....
GREAT JOB SO FAR :-)
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