Who knew Girls at play would be such fun. and Sisters, yet. Though it got a little rough; getting laid so nicely by the guys was probably worth it. Fun and Games! Always great fun.
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Anonymous08/25/06
Silly and unerotic
Typical play and gang-bang. And not for a moment there was an actual hint of taboo throughout the story.
Overall, it sucked!
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Anonymous08/26/06
potential
with a little more detail, it could have been better. how you described the first sister's bare pussy should be how you describe everything else. vivid is the key. let us see through your words.
ja' ne
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Anonymous02/12/07
This was great
I really liked this. This is actually one of my fantasies :-)
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Anonymous04/09/08
shit
shitty story it never works out someone ends up getting hurt and either tells the parents or the cops and hates the other for the rest of thier lives this belongs in the nonconsensual area
The previous commenter should remember that this is fiction.
Some suggestions: (1) supply more imagery to make the scenes vivid, (2) ramp up more slowly, especially if the finale is a bit over the top (in this case, begin with less-daring dares), and (3) convey the psychology of the characters. E.g., it isn't clear why the female bystanders would want their boyfriends to stuff the naked sister. You could have described the psychological reactions of the bystanders. Are each of the bystander couples accustomed to seeing the other engaged in sex? Do they enjoy it?
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Anonymous04/29/09
I'd read this again and again.
Excellent story, not too long but still hot as ever.
English
Terrible
What a dumb story... Lost interest real quickly
A Nice Twist!
Who knew Girls at play would be such fun. and Sisters, yet. Though it got a little rough; getting laid so nicely by the guys was probably worth it. Fun and Games! Always great fun.
Silly and unerotic
Typical play and gang-bang. And not for a moment there was an actual hint of taboo throughout the story.
Overall, it sucked!
potential
with a little more detail, it could have been better. how you described the first sister's bare pussy should be how you describe everything else. vivid is the key. let us see through your words.
ja' ne
This was great
I really liked this. This is actually one of my fantasies :-)
shit
shitty story it never works out someone ends up getting hurt and either tells the parents or the cops and hates the other for the rest of thier lives this belongs in the nonconsensual area
Interesting but flawed
The theme is an interesting one.
The previous commenter should remember that this is fiction.
Some suggestions: (1) supply more imagery to make the scenes vivid, (2) ramp up more slowly, especially if the finale is a bit over the top (in this case, begin with less-daring dares), and (3) convey the psychology of the characters. E.g., it isn't clear why the female bystanders would want their boyfriends to stuff the naked sister. You could have described the psychological reactions of the bystanders. Are each of the bystander couples accustomed to seeing the other engaged in sex? Do they enjoy it?
I'd read this again and again.
Excellent story, not too long but still hot as ever.
Wow
beautiful
write more pleas
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