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Unfinished Story
I loved both chapters of this story. The only thing that was hard to follow was the grammar and spelling other wise they were great. Very hot and very romantic. I hate the wimpy husband stories that are so prevelent on this site as well as other sites. So this one was refreshing. The only thing you didn't finish in your first story was weither your soon to be bride avoided getting pregnant from the unprotected sex Marco had with her.
wot a strang tail of mangelled wurds
..please use an editor. This tale was so full of grammatical errors I wondered if you do not have learning difficulty like dyslexia? A shame, as the tale was great and if you have then you must get an editor - don't lose the talent in translation.
needs an editor!
You aren't a native speaker of English, are you? Not a bad story but your weird spelling and terrible grammar prevent it from being really good. Perhaps a friend could go over your writing before you submit anything again.
Great stuff!
Your stories are wonderful!
Yes, sometimes your grammar, spelling or word choice are distracting, but I'm very happy you've made the effort to share your life experiences with the rest of us.
Had you not told us in several earlier stories that English is not your native language, and if you had not told us again in the last paragraph of this story, it would not have been hard to figure that out.
Thanks for the effort.
Absolute mindless shit !!!!
By an idiot "writer" !!
terrible
You're not a native speaker of English, are you? Deutsch? It shows. Get some help.
Susan
Dear Susan, he is not deutch, he is from a peasant country !
Yugo or Romany ! Deutche are not that stupid.
Great story
I loved this story and the first. Errors with spelling and grammar don't matter to me. If I understand what the words are, it works. Glad the guy got his threesome. With two girls and yourself, fun times are ahead.
3*
Deducted 2* for anal.
DWormcock is so stupid
she eats her food stamps
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