All Comments on '1994: Expanding Our Game Ch. 02'

I loved both chapters of this story. The only thing that was hard to follow was the grammar and spelling other wise they were great. Very hot and very romantic. I hate the wimpy husband stories that are so prevelent on this site as well as other sites. So this one was refreshing. The only thing you didn't finish in your first story was weither your soon to be bride avoided getting pregnant from the unprotected sex Marco had with her.

..please use an editor. This tale was so full of grammatical errors I wondered if you do not have learning difficulty like dyslexia? A shame, as the tale was great and if you have then you must get an editor - don't lose the talent in translation.

You aren't a native speaker of English, are you? Not a bad story but your weird spelling and terrible grammar prevent it from being really good. Perhaps a friend could go over your writing before you submit anything again.

Your stories are wonderful!

Yes, sometimes your grammar, spelling or word choice are distracting, but I'm very happy you've made the effort to share your life experiences with the rest of us.

Had you not told us in several earlier stories that English is not your native language, and if you had not told us again in the last paragraph of this story, it would not have been hard to figure that out.

Thanks for the effort.

By an idiot "writer" !!

You're not a native speaker of English, are you? Deutsch? It shows. Get some help.

Susan

Yugo or Romany ! Deutche are not that stupid.

I loved this story and the first. Errors with spelling and grammar don't matter to me. If I understand what the words are, it works. Glad the guy got his threesome. With two girls and yourself, fun times are ahead.

Deducted 2* for anal.

she eats her food stamps

Great story. Naturally most men fantasize about two hot women. your scenes to me are very plausible. The story also has good pace and enough give and take to make the last actions fun to read. Finally, I commend you on not beating the dead horse of background. As I tread this i gleaned enough about the 3 characters to make it a great story. .

I had to add...Doesn't anyone read these stories for the escape fiction value. Why all the comments about some language that has nothing to do with the E/F value. It amazes me the pseudo intellectual bull shit that masks as literary comments. Grow up.