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Fantastic!
After reading your other stories I find this one to be very erotic. It shows a whole different approach that shows how much you loved to be watched as your hubby makes love to you.
Why Not...
Los Vegas is always a gamble. If the Writer's male character wants to show his wife off to everyone - hey whatever turns him on. This is a pretty far reaching fantasy, but it takes all kinds. Now that's what I call a Loving wife; Oh, yeah, and he's what I call a crazy husband. Fun to read.
Hmmmm
Pretty hot, but the husband is playing with fire, he needs to be careful, or she will become anyone's slut, and he will have a real problem. And contrary to your prefacing remarks, if you have your characters behave in unrealistic situations, the readers will shoot you down about aids, std's and other possible scenarios. I mean, the stories do have to contain realism. They have to be for the most part believeable.
I think I read this before!
I am not saying you plagarized but this story is a lot like a couple of dozen others I have read. Keep your paragraphs smaller, Since you are dealing with descriptions and narrative for the most part, smaller paragraphs make th ereading easier.
My bigget problem with thi is that if you have been to Vegas you know they hate ANYTHING which will detract from the primary mission which is to have you gamble your money away! :-)
C
liked it a lot
I'd clean up the first paragraph a little, but the content was great. Could have been longer, but I enjoyed it a lot.
Werd
I can see this happening
Much more likely than the guy giving her away.
Well done and interesting.
Regards, DJ
Liked it
I liked the story. What happens in Vegas, stays in Vegas...sometimes...
Hot but could be hotter....
I really liked the images you have of the wife pressed up against the glass with the husband spanking her. I think you could have lengthened this part a little; the sub-dom vibe is so hot at this part. I like the way the husband kinda dominates everyone, even the kid who is watching.
Suggestions: Try and make a more vivid picture. Like, more details about the position she's in when the guy comes in...more description about the way Mike is fucking her.
Also, you spelled champagne wrong. It's spelled "champagne" and doesn't need a capital.
champaign/champagne
To all you ignorant fools and philistines:
champaign: Extensive tract of level open land
Champaign: A university town in east central Illinois adjoining Urbana
champagne: A white sparkling wine either produced in Champagne or resembling that produced there
Champagne: A region of northeastern France
My wife
would've had a heart attack if I did something like that. Thanks, good story!
Wow
I could envision the entire story and, being from Vegas, it didn't seem impossible or improbable. Very well written and had me playing with myself the whole story.
Picky, picky, picky
This site is for sex, fun and fantasy - and this one fits the bill. Don't want sex? Don't want fantasy? Go somewhere else. I don't come here for reality!
I loved this story and even though my husband and I are very conservative in our 35 years of great sex, I CAN imagine he would do this and I WOULD enjoy it!
Well done!
Very good but
This story was very good but I would have payed the guy to stay and if he wanted to fuck her he would have to give her the money. Why leave her as a slut when she could be a whore, and loving it.
Everyone wins in Vegas!
Vegas is an oddly sexy place where pretty much anything can and will happen so couple stories are even more sexy in this location. Having been there recently and spending some time in a casino with the gf there were a lot of fantasies running through my mind for her to be the star. Enjoyed your story a lot and especially how he was showing her off for anyone to see.
Thanks for sharing!
JC
Vegas
I want to go with you to Vegas!
That was great!!!
This was a very hot story. I loved it and there is no way that this is the end of the story. This has to be just the beginning of a week long series of a lovely woman getting fucked by at least 3 or 4 other men while hubby watches. Oh so damn hot to have your wife pleased by more than one cock. Knowing that as a husband we can give this gift to our wives to experience and let the other men have a little fun also. But in the end it is the husband that gets to keep her as he is the one she loves. Bring on chapter II please.
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