If you are interested in believable sex, this chapter is definitely unbelievable. Stepmom eagerly fucks her stepson immediately after Dad said "No, this is a one-time deal", but then she stops the son from cumming inside her because her husband would disapprove????? Fucking him again is the big No-No, yet she stops him before he finishes inside her. Way short of believable. And you throw in the usual porn facial as a substitute ending that Stepmom agrees to instead of cumming inside her. In a room full of women, none would eagerly agree to a messy, in-your-eyes facial instead of the real thing.
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Anonymous02/25/09
Jumped the shark
Chapters 1, 2 and 3 were brill. This is too far. You've destroyed the suspense. Terrible writing.
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Anonymous11/06/10
Suddenly son is a porn stud?
You kinda had something going. It wasn't perfect (the dad angle made no sense) but it was working okay as m/s fare. You were a bit too p0rny all along, then, he becomes abusive and you lost it. He was introverted, now he's a trash-talking porn wannabe?
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Anonymous12/05/10
Not exactly.
This jumps the gun, but you still can explain Billy's behavior with the fact that today's youth grows up with internet porn.
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Dear George,
If you are interested in believable sex, this chapter is definitely unbelievable. Stepmom eagerly fucks her stepson immediately after Dad said "No, this is a one-time deal", but then she stops the son from cumming inside her because her husband would disapprove????? Fucking him again is the big No-No, yet she stops him before he finishes inside her. Way short of believable. And you throw in the usual porn facial as a substitute ending that Stepmom agrees to instead of cumming inside her. In a room full of women, none would eagerly agree to a messy, in-your-eyes facial instead of the real thing.
Jumped the shark
Chapters 1, 2 and 3 were brill. This is too far. You've destroyed the suspense. Terrible writing.
Suddenly son is a porn stud?
You kinda had something going. It wasn't perfect (the dad angle made no sense) but it was working okay as m/s fare. You were a bit too p0rny all along, then, he becomes abusive and you lost it. He was introverted, now he's a trash-talking porn wannabe?
Not exactly.
This jumps the gun, but you still can explain Billy's behavior with the fact that today's youth grows up with internet porn.
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