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nice!!!
A very nice story with barely any sex in it. I thought it was well written without emphasizing the sex too much
I agree with the other reviewer
It is a nice little story with barely any sex in it, but I LIKE sex in a story. All that hot build up only to have the sex done in ONE paragraph? don't be afraid of sex, revel in it!
Nice story
Nice story. I would like to see you expand it more, add more chapters. You have some good characters started, run with the story see where it goes.....
thanks
Not literature, but better then most here.
Good story due to taking the time to develop. Ignore the "more seX, sEX, SEX!! critics, there's plenty of that already on this site. And grammar nitpickers.. gramamar is secondund to narative in my bookookook.
Well.. this site is FOR sex.
Way too much story and not at all descriptive sex. And for the fellow who said something about there being enough on this site already... well yeah. Duh. That's what this site is for.
bad
I felt like i was reading a nursery book not a adults story.
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