Being For The Benefit of Mr. Kite

cheating fucking bitch if that was my mom she would be dead to me

Wow! Another fun story. I am reading all of your stories (in alphabetical order). I am not getting much work done.

Loser wins -

I did not expect quite the finish you wrote this time this poor loser becomes a big winner - beyond creative - very nice.

if i was in the kids place as another post said. id prolly feel just as cheated on as dad. then would have taken my revenge on her. she likes sex right ... lol. time to pull out the blindfold, rope and have a little fun. lol

nice read

way to go, hooked, battered and fried.

twenty-four years of marriage

Nothing sexy about a middle 40s dried up old hide so gave the story a low rating.

twenty-four years of marriage

Everything is sexy about a middle 40s year old so gave the story a high rating.

C'mon

Finish it!

heh....even better the second time i read it

i forgot how good this one was till i found a link to it again.....gawd i love yer stories man....on my bad days i think u go to easy on the women....on my good days im a lil more forgiving! LOL

Good Premise

I like the way you reveal the truth of the story ever so slowly, and just on time for the audience to be surprised. You eschew all foreshadowing, and so it is treated with the deftness that such a surprise story requires.

Where I have my issue is the unrealistically clinical way in which all the characters acted once the cat was out of the bag. Work on that, stretch it out, giving the supporting characters more three dimensionality, and you'll have a stronger submission.

Great Read!!!

It could have been a great great read with a few more paragraphs. Thanks for sharing.

I gave it 5 stars..

.. what a great reveal. Please keep writing.

To quote that old Guiness Commercial...

BRILLIANT!

Just Priceless -

My second read was better than the first one -

She shot herself in the head then slipped in the dog shit - woot!!

I'm with Anons 'doth protest' & 'saw coming'

I do kinda resent the misdirection (or am amazed by the organizational structure) in being surprised by the immediate referral and attention to the area manager for the company! If this was a cold contact, how does a drop-in come to the attention of the biggest executive in a four-story office. Surely Boss has NOT told all his minions that he is boffing Sweetie AND to watch for anybody with that same last name? If Hubby called earlier for a tentative time to talk to someone (the only option which explains enough) then he should have expected to go straight to the Bull! Yes, as soon as he stated why he was there, the 'fox in the henhouse' became obvious. Of course, HDK writing this in LW of LIT helped a lot, too!

Loved it. Especially Sweetie tossing the DVD grenade was an unexpected delight! (Since it landed in her foxhole - pun intended!) Great read!
5*

I gave you five stars, of course but...

I have noticed that in this one as well as several of your stories (except the ones you bring black into the equation, I don't read them) you chop them off short without listing any more of the revenge taken except a very brief mention and sometimes not even that. I wish you would spell it out, a short additional chapter would be appreciated. Thank you for writing.

W H Y...............................

Can't I be that smart ? ? ? ?



bill

Another masterpiece

from the keyboard of HDK.

Good but Sad

Another sad tale of a stupid woman.

Clairvoyant check????

Maybe you should get a good dictionary. A clairvoyant claims to see the future/ tell your fortune.

Perhaps you meant Clandestine - secretive, undercover??

good read

needs a sequel.

not finished, finish your fucking stories!

Clever story

I thought he was toast. But he was "Smarter than the average Bear" and now will reap the rewards from both companies. Well planned.

curlycued!

HDK, I just loved the clever twists and turns you put into this story. And I am of the opinion, it was exactly as long as it needed to be. I must be very gullible, cause I never foresaw the wife driving herself off-the-cliff ending!

Ye Ha

It was was Foster in the library with a camera, not Colonel Mustard in the kitchen with a mallet. 5.

Well played!

Clever story on how the seemingly clueless husband turns the tables on his wife and lover and comes out smelling like a rose! Very funny.

good as a stand-alone but...

It really needs better character fleshing out and a second chapter wouldn't hurt. Like her side or the families POV.

Nice!!!! 5 stars all the way. I would like to read more of this story. I would like to find out what happened to the wife and the lover.

what a fucking Cunt wife!

She deserves a painful divorce that would leave her chopped up in small parts Dexter style. Glad he came out on top. But honestly I would have divorced her before hiring a PI. She was a Cunt anyway so who needs that!

Clairvoyant???

The word you're looking for might be "Clandestine" rather than "clairvoyant". Do you even have a dictionary, or if you do, how thick is the dust on it?!
Bad grammar makes a good story, a ridiculous one.

What the heck is a

clairvoyant check? Huh?

nice story

a bit confusing towards the end, but it worked. a fake or cursory check.

Great Story!

Love to see cheaters have their plans come back and bite them on the ass. She got bit big time. I really enjoyed this little story. I started feeling bad for the guy when I thought she was going to win BUT what an ending-Great. Thank You for a fun story.

Cheaters are stupid...

Cheaters are stupid, becuse: 1st - they think they never will be caught; 2nd - They think they are smarter than others; 3rd - They think they will never be punished...

Clairvoyant????

I think you mean clandestine! If you had a proof reader/editor then give them the sack; if not, then get one, because it's apparent that you need one!

Reads just as good second time around

The clairvoyant check is funny - HDK may have done that just to give the nattering nabobs of negativism something to find. Kind of like one of the old W. slip ups. Thank you for your story HDK!