Its a very good start for those who like this genre of fantasy. I realize there are a very few who in reality engage in this lifestyle but there are probably a lot more who for some reason like to read about it. Maybe work on developing the wifes thoughts and how his fantasy became hers. The fact that she was bedding his friends came out of no where. Dig deeper into their backrounds and make the story come alive.
English
good prologue
hope the story lives up
to its beginnings
or will it descend into
mediocrity ?
This looks like a series.
Its a very good start for those who like this genre of fantasy. I realize there are a very few who in reality engage in this lifestyle but there are probably a lot more who for some reason like to read about it. Maybe work on developing the wifes thoughts and how his fantasy became hers. The fact that she was bedding his friends came out of no where. Dig deeper into their backrounds and make the story come alive.
Good start keep going
You have the right idea for the wife. Hopefully the sexual encounter will be what we hoped for.
HOT
i know u say it is fiction
but so close to the reality my wife and i enjoy now
james_38671 yahoo
Good story
This is a good story with loads of potential. The character development was spot on.
Love it
Love a married white wife that gets hooked and this writer is GOOD. How she slides progressively deeper into a hot nasty lifestyle drives me crazy.
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