All Comments on 'Eat, Devour'

But the teasing was neither as intense nor as protracted as it could have been.

It would have been better if it had startrd earlier in time, with detailed descriptions of the disrobing process, the restraining process, and extended teasing (including of breasts, and possibly asshole) before the insertion of the 'bullets', etc. All of this could have been with dialogue in which the author tells the subject exactly what he's going to do next, and asking her whether that's what se wants, giving her 'choices' that he may or may not follow once she's spoken them, etc. and descriptions of what he actually did.

i rememeber in other stories u talkin bout kat..... wow... interes tin ..... dmcorydon@ao l.com