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Voyaging to a Hamburger Joint

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by Anonymous09/01/06

interesting

It is a complex poem in tone as the tone seems sincere one moment and playful the next, but some of the lines are very well crafted indeed. Also the bees in the ending seem curiously out of place for me. I have a very minor punctuation suggestion: a sentence containing but not entirely within parentheses should have the end punctuation on the outside of the parentheses, but otherwise, very evocative and interesting. Thank you! This poem has been (or will be quite shortly) mentioned in New Poems Reviews.

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by LeBroz07/31/07

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This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 36,500 poems.



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