All Comments on 'Foreplay'

um..it was ok...but where's all the detail?...where's the description of the sex?

The idea was great, and the writing and dialog was good as well, but it felt like a tease when you skipped right over the sex!

Ah well..

As the title was "foreplay", description of the sex really wasn't necessary. I found it to be quite stimulating, and a welcome change from the usual 'just get down to telling about fucking' stories. Great job!

They are complaining about the 'lack of detail'! They gotta be kids, too used to very graphic film/writing. Sometimes what you don't 'see' is better than what you do....the mind is great at imagination.

Well Done

It had me sitting on the edge of my seat. Even though I knew the next paragraph I couldn't wait to (hear?)Read the next.

good story do more you have what it takes

fuck or not? Gotta feed the imagination too, making it work too hard to visualize ruins it.

Whew, that was hot hot hot. Give us some more soon.

Very clever and very well written. The dialogue was quite well done.

This was one of the best stories on lit. I hope you will write many more storeis just like this.

If they had to get drunk to di "IT" that is not nearly as exciting as two people gradually becoming intimate.

Should have elaborated on the sex and it would have been better.

the story "FOREPLAY" was so-so the girl was to much of a bitch why would any guy even spend time around someone like that a normal guy would avoid all contact with such a bitch makes the whole story so unrealistic

However it was nicely done and the absence of over sized equipment was a nice subtraction.

all the teasing was a turn off and ruined the story right at the beginning.

And I liked it. Since I read for MY entertainment, thank you for writing.

Needs more details if its supposed to be erotica. Airport romance novels have more detailed action. Your writing form is good just need to spice it up a little.