The idea was great, and the writing and dialog was good as well, but it felt like a tease when you skipped right over the sex!
Ah well..
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Anonymous09/05/06
great story!
As the title was "foreplay", description of the sex really wasn't necessary. I found it to be quite stimulating, and a welcome change from the usual 'just get down to telling about fucking' stories. Great job!
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Anonymous09/05/06
Can you believe them?
They are complaining about the 'lack of detail'! They gotta be kids, too used to very graphic film/writing. Sometimes what you don't 'see' is better than what you do....the mind is great at imagination.
Well Done
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Anonymous09/06/06
loved it!
It had me sitting on the edge of my seat. Even though I knew the next paragraph I couldn't wait to (hear?)Read the next.
This was one of the best stories on lit. I hope you will write many more storeis just like this.
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Anonymous01/14/07
Drunk sex not nearly as exciting as sober sex.
If they had to get drunk to di "IT" that is not nearly as exciting as two people gradually becoming intimate.
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Anonymous05/22/07
Nice
Should have elaborated on the sex and it would have been better.
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Anonymous02/22/08
so-so
the story "FOREPLAY" was so-so the girl was to much of a bitch why would any guy even spend time around someone like that a normal guy would avoid all contact with such a bitch makes the whole story so unrealistic
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Anonymous12/01/08
I too could have done without the drunk aspect.
However it was nicely done and the absence of over sized equipment was a nice subtraction.
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Anonymous09/07/13
not good
all the teasing was a turn off and ruined the story right at the beginning.
English
just good
um..it was ok...but where's all the detail?...where's the description of the sex?
Liked it, but...
The idea was great, and the writing and dialog was good as well, but it felt like a tease when you skipped right over the sex!
Ah well..
great story!
As the title was "foreplay", description of the sex really wasn't necessary. I found it to be quite stimulating, and a welcome change from the usual 'just get down to telling about fucking' stories. Great job!
Can you believe them?
They are complaining about the 'lack of detail'! They gotta be kids, too used to very graphic film/writing. Sometimes what you don't 'see' is better than what you do....the mind is great at imagination.
Well Done
loved it!
It had me sitting on the edge of my seat. Even though I knew the next paragraph I couldn't wait to (hear?)Read the next.
great job
good story do more you have what it takes
Did they...
fuck or not? Gotta feed the imagination too, making it work too hard to visualize ruins it.
outstanding!
Whew, that was hot hot hot. Give us some more soon.
Unique
Very clever and very well written. The dialogue was quite well done.
One of the all time best.
This was one of the best stories on lit. I hope you will write many more storeis just like this.
Drunk sex not nearly as exciting as sober sex.
If they had to get drunk to di "IT" that is not nearly as exciting as two people gradually becoming intimate.
Nice
Should have elaborated on the sex and it would have been better.
so-so
the story "FOREPLAY" was so-so the girl was to much of a bitch why would any guy even spend time around someone like that a normal guy would avoid all contact with such a bitch makes the whole story so unrealistic
I too could have done without the drunk aspect.
However it was nicely done and the absence of over sized equipment was a nice subtraction.
not good
all the teasing was a turn off and ruined the story right at the beginning.
I thought this was presented in a unique and interesting way.
And I liked it. Since I read for MY entertainment, thank you for writing.
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