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Heroine of The Night

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous09/06/06

Decent effort, but needs a lot of work

I liked the general flow of the story... sort of.

However:

1) She's a BBW, with a cotton-candy soft body, who can spin-kick and generally knock the crap out of two muggers? and then they apologize before running off?

2) Character development is completely lacking. "I rescued him, then we screwed like weasels."

3) Tries to be hot, but very perfunctory descriptions of sex acts.

I'd like to see this one re-written and passed under an editor's nose once or twice.

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by MrFAZAW09/08/06

Thank you for the BBW

darlin' I love BBW stories. I personally am a BBW Lover so I'm all over it ... bring 'em on ... thank you so much


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