by The_Dreamscaper
Okay,so you mis-numbered the chapters!!!!!!!!I'm really glad you got the next one done. Please continue to write.
Thanks for what you've written, and I look forward to more!!!!!!!
Love the story; but I have one suggestion. We know the boy's name is Bobby; you have a tendency to keep using his name over and over and over again. It's annoying. We know who you're writing about. How about using he or him or his, etc. Hope you take this as positive criticism; that's my intent.
Rachel was suddenly worried, she had somehow forgotten that she had twin daughters.
Wha!?
That must be one of the side effects of the semen Rachel's been consuming like gusto.
I can imagine Bobby forgot he also had sisters in the next chapter cause blood has been rushing out of his head to else where...
HA. Just having fun. Keep the chapters comin.
Real HOT.
this is an great storie hope the next chappetrs will come soon :)
Plagiarize; verb; to steal and use as one's own. see, "Six Times a Day" by spacer x.
It sounds like six times a day but it is not. Keep the stories coming
Loved the contrast, thanks for giving the Doctor a "Hairy" pussy. Hope she has a "Deep" one too!
Brilliant, just need him to fuck his mom and then bring the two sisters into the story, brilliant, write on, write more.
Loved the series so far, keep'em coming! Its great how you've taken it slow up to this point - good job & can't wait to read the next one!
the next chapter shoould be the doctor suggeSTing a radicaule treatment?the son being asked to lie in his bed ,and close your eyes ,then the doctor unknown to the son his mmother is home .take his mother by the hand and guide her to mount her son ,all the while telling him to keep his eyes closed,then as mom mounts her son ,the doctor guides hsi hands to his mother's breasts.
then as the son enters hsi mother,the son opens his eyes expecting to see the doctor riding him.findiing his mother instead.and the doctor encourages it till they both cumm.
the doctor tell them to continue this treatment each nite.
and asks the mother to blow her son each morning.
excellent story. every chapter is like a tease...can't wait to see what happens next.
His mom is the one person who really should have his cum in her belly. His sister should be next to have her's filled. A great story. thanks ....Rich
Great story, can`t wait for aunt Jean`s involvement, maybe you can involve Rachel`s twin daughters as well.
Look forward to the next chapter. Keep up the good work.
It's great story, I love it, but where is chapter 04?
That was the greatest story I had read to date. Thank you and please keep going on with your writing.
This story needs followed up on with more chapters - lots more chapters!
Oh yeah, where is chapter 4? or was chapter 5 a typo in the title?E1D1
This is the SAME story you posted 2 years ago.
I see NO changes to, it at all.
This story can only be fantasy, but fuck it is great reading.
There has to be a ch6 where he gets to fuck his mother
I enjoyed the series,
please continue!!
He needs to fuck his mother too and cum in the Dr's pussy too
keep it going he need to fuck his sister while she eats her mom
you should have the sisters, mother, and doctor all fucking him at the same time
Like the others, no matter what, (quit your job, take a full year brake, whatever...) you have to keep on going with that story. We want the mother and sister to become full time sluts for the sake of their 'son/brother'... and maybe for a few of his school friends.
God, I love it.
You have to finish this story, its crime to leave your fans hanging like this......
of their own house? Don't they have a key?
very well done story with lots of hot little scenes ...
only as a fellow writer gently critiquing however you should have someone proof your story for some little errors here and there ... just to make it 'perfect' but the mistakes were not so glaring to distract from the heat of your imagination :)
would love to see some continued adventures etc ... :) well done :)
DANG I SURE ENJOY READ CH.1 TO 5 AND WONDER IF U PLAN ON WRITE SOME MORE ALSO KEEP IT UP GOOD JOB :-D
reminds me of doing my mother when i was younger, loved licking her hairy cunt
It says to be continued, but has not been. When does he do his mom and his sisters. Lets get with it.
Are you still alive? I hope so. I would love to read another chapter. Great stuff!
Great story. It's so hot and I want more. If you still write erotica, please give us another (or more) chapter.
Thanks for a lovely story - now he MUST fuck his mum and sisters - making all three pregnant - what about his gran? - any aunts too - the doctor too - if she has a daughter - fuck her too - married neighbours and their daughters too - ALL females must sample his beautiful cock.
Sarah Leather, London England.
leathercatsuitgirl@hotmail.co.uk
motherfucking by a gifted author who's 18 to 22, so maybe still a late teenager. Like most boys his age he's real interested in that wonderful hole between his mother's legs, his own mother's mommy-cunt. Lots of other young males are too, as witness all the comments to this story. One guy writes that it "reminds me of doing my mother when i was younger, loved licking her hairy cunt." This is the true voice of an honest son who's fascinated, really obsessed, by his own mother's cunt. He loves getting his head between his mom's thighs, going face to face with her fat wet twat, probing it with his tongue and lips, and slurping away like crazy. Sure, boys will mess around with inferior twats, but the one that holds them in thrall is their own mommy's twat. Mom's cunt has everything a boy needs--it's by far the coziest and comfiest one he'll ever find, it gives off the richest aroma of a slobbering cunt he'll ever deeply inhale--his own mother's intoxicating cunt-smell. Best of all, boys know that their mom's twat is the nature-given receptacle for all the large doses of creamy semen they've got sloshing around in their young balls. Boys are real eager to give their mother what's waiting for her in their hot young balls, their potent young sperm, right up where it belongs, right up their mommy's wonderful twat. A boy empties his balls up his mother's twat, mom joyfully receives the gift from her darling man-child (and cums like crazy), and mother and son smile at each other, his fat young prick still buried in his mother's cunt.
God story got me so wet. loved all chapters mom was good to slowly get to son. his dick is great to think of. delish dick story.
Even if she is a "Dr.," which I doubt, she should have her license revoked and her sorry ass thrown into jail. Where does this filthy tramp come off fucking her own patient? Dreamscaper, I said you were a genius of stories of hot motherfucking, and I still believe it. I know you're a young guy but even you should realize that for a story of motherfucking you need a mother who's getting fucked by her own son. Bobby should never ever have fucked that pig "Dr." White. He'll probably get a disease from her skanky fuckpit. Please, dear Author, have Bobby unload his young balls and shoot his huge geyser of creamy semen up the one twat where his semen belongs, his own mother's beautiful, incomparable twat. That's what your many faithful fans want to see.
As much, as half of the male population, on this planet, would love to experience this fantasy first hand............in order for you, to reach a new plateau, you, must, become incredibly serious, in providing crystal clear, details, details, details, details.
Dig deep and write each story/chapter, as if your audience were blind, paint them, create for them, a "vivid" crystal clear image, that causes their imagination to be placed on hold..................conjure up images, sounds, smells, tastes, that, creates, such an environment, that, they believe, Dr Liz and his mother are both sucking their cock, as well as, sister Lisa, standing right next to them, offering up, her soaking wet panties.
But, that is just me.
Well it has been quite a few years so I guess no more episodes are coming. Too bad. He never got his mom or his sisters or any of their asses. Let me know if you ever write any more.
I know from writing myself it kinda comes and goes. People get it out of their system and quit.
Too bad. I was hoping he would plant a baby in mom and the doctor.
would love to read what happens next and if Rachel and Bobby invite the twins Lisa and Theresa to join them
I've waited till this chapter to give you my take on all the chapters. They are quiet good but for the fact that they were a bit short in pages being either one or two pages which could have been at least three. I sure hope you keep going on this story and at the rate of the amount of pages you're writing in could end up with another four chapters in which Bobby gets to fuck mum the doctor and hopefully his twin sisters and get them all pregnant, maybe even throw in his grandmas from both siges of the family tree, maybe a couple of cougars from the neighborhood, hell !!!!! throw in a couple of aunts and also getting them all pregnant so he can end up owning his own little harem. That's all I can think of to put my two cents worth in so thanks for a good series, but please, please keep going on it and finish it DON'T KEEP us hanging in midair mate.
i first read this in 2011 and you still haven't written a part 6 common man its good keep going.
Keep it going man, I've never been a fan of multi chapter stories but I want to read more about this one
Not believable. Maybe your own hidden desire to have a gigantic dick.
So fucking hot.Brings the memories of fucking my mom a.nd older sisters like it was yesterday. Would love to tell.When do we get more from you ?
You really can't leave this story here. Will he ever get to fuck his mother, and now most likely his sisters too, You can get rid of the doctor though. She got her jollies now, so she can leave.
this story starts with a son being serviced by his mom and ends up with his sister watching as her mother, son and their doctor are all having a wonderful play time. Big tits, cum all over a face and hair, pussy munching, huge loads of cum, and now a young lady being intrigued by watching. Can it get any better?
Holy shit this was off the hook. Shame you stopped writing. Hopefully you will start up again soon
it would add so much if the writer described the mums pussy with more detail, rather than clean shaved and very wet. It could have been described as very fleshy, pouting lips or even swollen protruding labials secreting clear sweet nectar, pulsating and swelling for the very large angrily throbbing cock that was ridged with thick purple veins feeding it so much power...