by ABSTRUSE
Your voice weaves through this piece in a way I can feel, and the metaphor is well-executed. Very nice work -- on multiple levels.
I love it that you're experimenting with poetry more and more, it makes me happy. So when you reading some of these? *grin*
...and well applied. A strong voice here, speaking about it's subject with passion. A fine read...and like Ari, one I would like to hear read with the emphasis of the poet's own specific emotion in each line.
Abs, I loved this poem - creepy, gut wrenching imagery and a perfect metaphor - really made me stop short and think...
I wanted to say 'thanks' but i wasnt sure what i would be thanking you for, i really love this poem, and i think you have captured the element of such indecision and the memories of the good and the bad so well. Absolutely wonderous.