Why not just mimeograph your stories? Or better yet, just have us fill in the blank. This shit is getting old and tedious.
Jeeze, I would love to see something original out of you.
C
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Anonymous09/15/06
Hmm...
I think the story was good, however the loop back to the beginning leaves out a bit too much. For example, if the husband was upset to the point where she didn't get an envelope for more than the usual 1 month period, why not play that up more? Include a scene at home when she gets back with them figuring out the boundaries. This keeps it not only exciting, but makes it seem like more than the typical - husband who wants to see other men have sex with his wife or man who is turned on by sloppy seconds.
What kind of envelope is it by the way? A vellum envelope? White with plain lettering? A translucent envelope? Is it the same every time or different? Is it scented? If there is a favorite scent that is used over time that only heightens the excitement.
Also show more of the alternation between the husband and wife in terms of fantasies. What is the one the wife liked the most that the husband provided and vice versa?
In terms of literature, there's little plot, no impact character, no bumps along the way and no conflict beyond the wife's initial concerns about her marriage. Once that minor hurdle is cleared, the story devolves into loosely connected vignettes with the wife screwing some random dude, telling the cuckolded husband about her 'date' and then them having sex. Yawn. Their "wildness" even becomes predictable with their monthly schedule of 'kink'. The story bumbles along to no useful purpose and finally, mercifully ends.
I gave it more than a one but not much more.
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Anonymous09/15/06
Delightful comedy
Who can help but not laugh reading this truly funny tale. I recall a movie with the same name (Pillow Talk) that came out in 1959 and starred Doris Day and Rock Hudson. Of course the story line in the movie differed from that here in the story. But both movie and Plain Bob's story were both very delightful comedies. More of the same Plain Bob!
by
Anonymous09/15/06
A Delightful Self Cuckolder Helplessly Pimps Again
Jeez bobie this is so rote. The wimp beats on his loving wife 2 days after being wed to fuck another guy(why? He selfishly has this deviant sickness for sloppy 12ths but has to start somewhere).
For 10 years he keeps nagging "when will you finally make me a cuckolded idiot pathetic helpless humiliated less than a man dumb fuck wimp. Don't you disrespect me enough yet? When will you see the light that I want you to be a whore so we can share some other guys cum and hopefully get you pregnant and some meaningful STD's?"
Hmmm! Did I forget anything? Oh yeah! "Say there wife whore, your last gangbang only had 12 guys with much bigger cocks than my liddle one but only 4 were blacks and we need to even things up racialy so I stop complaining. So tonight here in our bed while I'm in the closet jacking off again, I have paid 15 big black cocks to fuck you non-stop all weekend with another crew to start Monday morning. Man thank God for the long Christmas Holiday Weekend. Merry Christmas Whore".
It is with such tender wimpiness that bobie is tolerated for a while longer or until a new pimp is located. One that she can respect.
Man oh man does that ever tares at your heart strings? No! Not mine either. Get back on the wimpship bobie before it leaves once more.
by
Anonymous09/15/06
What she didn't realize
GARY HAD NOT FORGIVEN HER, HE WAITED IN THE CLOSET WITH A SAWED OFF SHOTGUN, SO HE COULD KILL HER AND HER LOVER, SOME FAG NAMED "PLAIN BOB", WITH ONE BLAST FROM BOTH BARRELS. SHIT THIS WAS GONNA BE MESSY......AND FUN.
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Anonymous09/15/06
oops
She pulled the paper from the envelope. It was divorce papers!
I really liked this story. Very well done and well written. I wish there was a little more action with the husband and wife. Some cream-pie eating maybe?
Wondering if those two stories you mentioned were real. If so could you send me the links bensterboy '@' gmail.com
I've been reading all your stories one by one over the last few weeks, and i should habe recogniszd this as one of yours;
Excellent!
Nice to see you back on literotica.
English
Damn JPB, your shit is getting really weak.
Why not just mimeograph your stories? Or better yet, just have us fill in the blank. This shit is getting old and tedious.
Jeeze, I would love to see something original out of you.
C
Hmm...
I think the story was good, however the loop back to the beginning leaves out a bit too much. For example, if the husband was upset to the point where she didn't get an envelope for more than the usual 1 month period, why not play that up more? Include a scene at home when she gets back with them figuring out the boundaries. This keeps it not only exciting, but makes it seem like more than the typical - husband who wants to see other men have sex with his wife or man who is turned on by sloppy seconds.
What kind of envelope is it by the way? A vellum envelope? White with plain lettering? A translucent envelope? Is it the same every time or different? Is it scented? If there is a favorite scent that is used over time that only heightens the excitement.
Also show more of the alternation between the husband and wife in terms of fantasies. What is the one the wife liked the most that the husband provided and vice versa?
I think I've got it...
JPB stands for Just Plain Boring.
It's sad when 'kinky' becomes predictable
Not really my cup of tea.
In terms of literature, there's little plot, no impact character, no bumps along the way and no conflict beyond the wife's initial concerns about her marriage. Once that minor hurdle is cleared, the story devolves into loosely connected vignettes with the wife screwing some random dude, telling the cuckolded husband about her 'date' and then them having sex. Yawn. Their "wildness" even becomes predictable with their monthly schedule of 'kink'. The story bumbles along to no useful purpose and finally, mercifully ends.
I gave it more than a one but not much more.
Delightful comedy
Who can help but not laugh reading this truly funny tale. I recall a movie with the same name (Pillow Talk) that came out in 1959 and starred Doris Day and Rock Hudson. Of course the story line in the movie differed from that here in the story. But both movie and Plain Bob's story were both very delightful comedies. More of the same Plain Bob!
A Delightful Self Cuckolder Helplessly Pimps Again
Jeez bobie this is so rote. The wimp beats on his loving wife 2 days after being wed to fuck another guy(why? He selfishly has this deviant sickness for sloppy 12ths but has to start somewhere).
For 10 years he keeps nagging "when will you finally make me a cuckolded idiot pathetic helpless humiliated less than a man dumb fuck wimp. Don't you disrespect me enough yet? When will you see the light that I want you to be a whore so we can share some other guys cum and hopefully get you pregnant and some meaningful STD's?"
Hmmm! Did I forget anything? Oh yeah! "Say there wife whore, your last gangbang only had 12 guys with much bigger cocks than my liddle one but only 4 were blacks and we need to even things up racialy so I stop complaining. So tonight here in our bed while I'm in the closet jacking off again, I have paid 15 big black cocks to fuck you non-stop all weekend with another crew to start Monday morning. Man thank God for the long Christmas Holiday Weekend. Merry Christmas Whore".
It is with such tender wimpiness that bobie is tolerated for a while longer or until a new pimp is located. One that she can respect.
Man oh man does that ever tares at your heart strings? No! Not mine either. Get back on the wimpship bobie before it leaves once more.
What she didn't realize
GARY HAD NOT FORGIVEN HER, HE WAITED IN THE CLOSET WITH A SAWED OFF SHOTGUN, SO HE COULD KILL HER AND HER LOVER, SOME FAG NAMED "PLAIN BOB", WITH ONE BLAST FROM BOTH BARRELS. SHIT THIS WAS GONNA BE MESSY......AND FUN.
oops
She pulled the paper from the envelope. It was divorce papers!
Pretty damn good
I really liked this story. Very well done and well written. I wish there was a little more action with the husband and wife. Some cream-pie eating maybe?
Wondering if those two stories you mentioned were real. If so could you send me the links bensterboy '@' gmail.com
Thanks
Good work though
I liked it
I liked it!
Hey Bob
I've been reading all your stories one by one over the last few weeks, and i should habe recogniszd this as one of yours;
Excellent!
Nice to see you back on literotica.
I would have given it 5*****
Until the perverted ass fucking so I gave the 1* it deserves.
What was in store?
He finally had all his ducks in a row. She was being served with divorce papers. I wonder if that made he all tingly?
I think this new envelope was something special
Something out of the ordinary. I think it was divorce papers.
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