Wonderful start to a great series. Please do continue.
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Anonymous09/30/06
well done
Wonderful job with this, its was well written and while there was not a large amount of character definition what was there was enough to get me interested in them.
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Anonymous08/19/07
well written
The plot's almost better than the sex, and that was good.
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Anonymous01/04/10
Free Spirits...
Loved it...Interesting plot.. especially loved it when raven sees him the first time and says "It Worked" as if he had just manifested out of thin air..
Ignore the first comment, he is an idiot..
~ Gary (Garyandrewsbodyguard@yahoo.com)
Yeah, I'm afraid it might be the start of a series, but if it is, I hope you will handle the rest as well as you did this one. More excuse for the sex here than in 'Lost Together', but still restrained sex and well-handled, and appropriate to the story line.
I'd love to see this story from the girls point of view... When Raven was getting the oils and the massages, it would be exciting to read her reactions...good story all the same mate
English
GOOD STORY
It needs a follow up. he needs to fuck the other two and possibly the mother
Fires Well Lit
Wonderful start to a great series. Please do continue.
well done
Wonderful job with this, its was well written and while there was not a large amount of character definition what was there was enough to get me interested in them.
well written
The plot's almost better than the sex, and that was good.
Free Spirits...
Loved it...Interesting plot.. especially loved it when raven sees him the first time and says "It Worked" as if he had just manifested out of thin air..
Ignore the first comment, he is an idiot..
~ Gary (Garyandrewsbodyguard@yahoo.com)
Good work
Yeah, I'm afraid it might be the start of a series, but if it is, I hope you will handle the rest as well as you did this one. More excuse for the sex here than in 'Lost Together', but still restrained sex and well-handled, and appropriate to the story line.
Great work.
Different perspective
I'd love to see this story from the girls point of view... When Raven was getting the oils and the massages, it would be exciting to read her reactions...good story all the same mate
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