Its a great start to your story, but you gave no indication it was just part of a story, not completed. That was definately not a good place to quit, so I hope you will continue and finish it properly. Still, very good so far.
You're probably responsible for 1,000 cases of blue balls!!!
I'm soaking wet, wish I was the woman!
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Great Start, but Why Did You Stop?
Its a great start to your story, but you gave no indication it was just part of a story, not completed. That was definately not a good place to quit, so I hope you will continue and finish it properly. Still, very good so far.
I agree, keep going......
You're probably responsible for 1,000 cases of blue balls!!!
Panting
I'm soaking wet, wish I was the woman!
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