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A very skillful wordsmith
'Zade is a superlative wordsmith. Her work is positively elegant in this regard. The subject matter of this sally makes me a bit queazy, so it's hard for me to say much about the substance of it except that clever poems about prosaic subjects have a long and honored place in the canons of literature, and are often much beloved. This young lady has the potential to make a lasting contribution to this genre. Readers should not be dismissive because the subject of such entries is not the sublime or transcendental - we all live in the corporeal world also, and that side of life is worthy of verse.
Ye Gods!
Squirmy. I would have laughed out loud if I hadn't been so busy cringeing. I hesitate to say I 'enjoyed' it but it certainly caught my attention.
I'll say 'well done' if you promise never to write one like that again.
Alex
Bloody hell Shaz
Very chucklesome dear, pretty good sumary of the modern NHS too.... better off at the freakin vet's
Agh!
I read it twice. I suppose that's a good thing, but frankly, the first time I was too shocked at the brazenness and the second time I was following the rhyming scheme. But really, I applaud the madness. Standing ovation, even. :D
Priceless
A jewel beyond compare.
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The polite response that some might make ~
"It's too much information;"
But though it's graphic
It serves its purpose
With satire on many levels.
I can’t wait to be shocked again!
The real shock for me was that for once, I agree with LeBroz! Saying it in my words, I’ll add that it seems like you are swinging between enjoying the sheer shock value of brazingly saying: “Shit” in a poem to the supposedly delicate readership; and a more subtle style, which allows the reader to take a hint rather than being punched in the face, Vaudevillian style.
As far as LeBroz hint to satire on many levels, that is true of course. The culture of consumption; the over consumption of food; you even got global economy into it…
Personally, I prefer, stories or poems which allow the reader to create the “dirtiest” words in his/her mind by hint and suggestion. Never mind that, If you need to shock me more and write “shitty” poems like this one – I think you are guaranteed many more “100” and thanks from readers who just can’t wait to be shocked again…
applaud the madness, indeed
You say quite boldly what many would be afraid to. Funny "shit", 'zade.
Damn...
I'm still snickering.
Brilliant
Brilliant, just brilliant. I need not say more.
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This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 37,500 poems.
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