I love your command of the written word. There are times that vulgarities and common phrases actually lessen the effect of the story, and it was incredibly refreshing to read this. Pure pleasure, and a great way to leave the door open for Part 2, which I believe (hope) is exactly what you intended to do. Hook them with the first sentence, and always leave them wanting more! Good job!!!
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bravo!
I love your command of the written word. There are times that vulgarities and common phrases actually lessen the effect of the story, and it was incredibly refreshing to read this. Pure pleasure, and a great way to leave the door open for Part 2, which I believe (hope) is exactly what you intended to do. Hook them with the first sentence, and always leave them wanting more! Good job!!!
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