Two cousins forced together by family discord, find comfort and affection with each other. Eventually they discover their sexual side. Something very sweet about this one. Terrific Write.
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Anonymous10/01/06
What do you mean you guys!!!?
Look this stereo-type of guys being not romantic, and selfish and blah blah blah... is totally frustrating!
I LOVE foreplay... actually more than sex!!! Of course sex is needed, or foreplay would be like... well, it just wouldn't end!
There is nothing more satisfying then watching a woman enjoying sex. It is the biggest turn on I have ever enjoyed.
Sorry, I ranted a bit.
OK this story was very sweet, and yes the BJ was a bit abrupt. You could have had more of her teasing him, and he could have been red-faced or hid under the covers, then she could have felt bad and started... or something.
In the original draft, Laura does start with some touching and fondling. I changed it because I wanted to make sure the point got across that she is MUCH more experienced and assertive than he is. Thinking about it now, I think it would have worked better with a little more foreplay. Thank's for the constructive criticism, it's very helpful.
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Not to bad a start--Personally I think that it ...
would have seemed more real if it had started with petting instead with a BJ but for some reason you guys like to start there.
Kissing Cousins!
Two cousins forced together by family discord, find comfort and affection with each other. Eventually they discover their sexual side. Something very sweet about this one. Terrific Write.
What do you mean you guys!!!?
Look this stereo-type of guys being not romantic, and selfish and blah blah blah... is totally frustrating!
I LOVE foreplay... actually more than sex!!! Of course sex is needed, or foreplay would be like... well, it just wouldn't end!
There is nothing more satisfying then watching a woman enjoying sex. It is the biggest turn on I have ever enjoyed.
Sorry, I ranted a bit.
OK this story was very sweet, and yes the BJ was a bit abrupt. You could have had more of her teasing him, and he could have been red-faced or hid under the covers, then she could have felt bad and started... or something.
Author's comment
In the original draft, Laura does start with some touching and fondling. I changed it because I wanted to make sure the point got across that she is MUCH more experienced and assertive than he is. Thinking about it now, I think it would have worked better with a little more foreplay. Thank's for the constructive criticism, it's very helpful.
Nicely introduced
So, who was her first? Her father?
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