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Why?
Spelling mistakes and the question of why write it? It was hurried and the punch line was as bad as the lack of erotica.
This was weak as water.
Now that's what I call a punchline!!!
Didn't see that one coming at all.
Huh
not worth commenting...
I am
runing out of ZEROES!
Weak joke
Poorly executed twist.
What & Without Clarity
If it requires more than one (1) read to understand the what then the writer didn't do their job - or the reader just didn't care.
Here in the interchangeable name game whoose on second and whooose out - clarity should matter even if its after the fact.
I give up
I have read the last 4 paragraphs over and over and I still have no idea who is fucking who, who is screaming at who, and who is running out the door. What a disaster!
Improbable ending
The author lays no groundwork for the hubby's infidelity. In fact, given what JPB said about him, the conclusion to the story is very improbable. It's bad fiction because the characters don't act in ways that are consonant with what the author has told us and shown us about them.
Sorry, Bob. You blew it on this one.
huh?
whom was doing what to whom?
Are You Kidding
You have this guy totally in Love with her and risking their union with her past indiscretions. You must be exhausred, no sleep, no common sense, this isn't even a dumb twist of evemts. Ridiculous reading, shame on you!!!
I gave you a fifty, only brcause the story flowed with some interest. You should remove it from Literotica, it's a blemish on your usual writing skills.
Nice flip
She's supposed to be the easy slut and he ends up breaking the marriage. She probably had to work very hard to repress her easy nature for him and remain faithful. Some payback. This reminds me of "Pride comes before the fall". He should have been watching his own behavior rather than worrying about hers. I liked it.
How stupid--I rated it 3*
Jimmy is the cheater and Michelle is the faithful wife.
Funny!
Nice twist on the theme!
HUH????
I gave it a 1 because I couldn't figure out the ending even after reading it 3 times.
I've Met This Guy
He's at most Friday Happy Hours. He listens to the jocks, the stories, fantasizes about the thrills of strange sex and conquests, fancies himself a man and TOTALLY fucks up the best thing that ever happened to him.
Now his Friday night jock friends will get to have a piece of what once was very special to him...Loser!!!
Thanks JPB, you do twist some good ones!!!
NO "W" QUESTIONS TO BE ASKED
the proof is in the pudding and Marry_er Beware TK U MLJ LV NV
Don't you get it?
He was cheating on Michelle.
Nice
He was the cheating jerkoff skank prick husband. Fucking asshole. All cheaters should suffer in pain.
Enjoyed it
Well, we really don't know if the wife was also cheating. They were both sluts.
Out of the blue!
I get the twisted, surprise ending - he's the cheater. But where did that come from? He's pining away for her, waits for her for years, gets her and then HE cheats? Sorry, that was just too big a turn around. BAH!
It sucked so?
So why? Who's the asshole or are they both? Didn't get it!
missing ?
Is the rest of this missing ?
We go from him suspecting her on some pretty solid signs to suddenly he cheats.
Definitely not one of JPBs good stories.
Lost
I don't understand the ending. He supposedly caught her and yet you put that she said how could you?
strange
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