by wishfulthinking
As always, I'm never disappointed when I read your work, even if you said it was quickly put together. The premise is interesting enough to develop further into subsequent chapters. You are one of the best and hottest writers on this site. I just wish you would submit your writing material more frequently!! :)
Devoted fan
I absolutely loved this story and hope that you write subsequent chapters, maybe with different girls, too? Love the tentacles.
...has been reviewed on the New Strories Review thread of the Author's Hangout.
I absolutely love your style of writing! except i wish youd continue your other stories...
It's amazing the amount of detail and emotion you portray with just a few words. Nervous, shy, sweetly and innocently responsive and then intensely sensual. You take your readers through the entire gambit. I hope someday to be as good.
I like , I like, I LIKE.... I also cant wait for the rest of your stories, pleeeez finish them soon??
I just have one thing to say about this story, even though it is great, I just find myself wishing that the ending of the story was just a tad longer :)
love
rania
what's that comment supposed to mean? this isn't the beginning of a series and this will be the only story! how unfortunate
Thank You for a wonderful read , I suspect I'm going to have a lot of fun working my way through the list of submissions I see. If you use this much detail in your heroines' feelings, Oh The Joy !!! Thankz Again !
I LOVED THIS what do you mean no more there HAS to be more this wAS FRIGGIN AWESOME!!!!
This was so great, and I wish it didn't end yet! I like all of your work, though. Really great writing style.
I had to leave in the middle of the story, I had a horrible time concentrating until I could return to finish the story!!! I loved it, I am so wet. It is very disappointing, almost gut wrenching to find that there will be no sequels! Please reconsider.
I really loved this story. I just wish there was more to the story.
There is too much background to the story and hints at a deep plot to leave it like this. Your such a good writer, I know this story can be great!
Nooo, this can't be the absolute end.
Just a little bit more, please.
Great story!!!
Please do not leave this story just like that.
You have a great imagination and this story is excellent. I have read your other stories, and of them all this is the best!
Please continue this story!
Aaaawwww but i I really really like Jaikem.....maybe one day you'll think to yourself, hmmm why didn't I write more with that character, he was such a good character too, he deserves more story. Maybe.
Please continue this plot, it is truly well written and the ideas novell.
I think you should totally carry this on for another few chapters. Do wish men had those feelers though :D
I really want this to become a short novel learn more of them Pleaseeeeeeeee!
I realize you said absolute end but please consider at least one or two more chapters so we can understand more about his position and her step-mother.
I, REALLY, wish you would come back to this story and add more . . . maybe making it one of your series.
so harsh! LOL....c'mon pls lengthen the story....at least a short novel...or maybe a lengthy novel even and publish it...i'd definitely pay for whatever u write...you're very good
"absolute" is such a funny word. for instance, i am absolutely done with my boyfriend...until we get back together. orrrrr, i absolutely quit smoking...between cigarettes.
add more please!
This could make such a good series!! I am begging, like many other people that have commented on this story, PLEASE continue this story!!!!!
Please could you expand the story of them and the world they inhabit.
Okay, I'm going to add my voice to the fray and ask that you PLEASE add more to this. It was awesome!!
We are all begging you!!! Please add more you can't just leave it at that!! What happend next? He suddenly claimed her as his and his alone so now what? What happens when the men come back and another guy goes to have sex with her? Does Jaikem freak out and attack the guy? What happens!!! You have such a good set up right here please continue!!
Please please please please please write a part 2 pleease!!!!!!!
And I love how you ended it, just wish it was slightly longer, those feelers sound really fun :)
If he's royal, what's he doing in a mercenary company?